Twist'd Dragon Fire~

Dragons breathe fire

    within gray matter

igniting an apocalyptica

     of monstrosity's magnitude

drenching beads of sweat'd contrition

       in contaminated danger's rush

radioactive particles fall

    'tween red paint'd eye squints

dulling senses of time's credibility

     woke up in a catacomb'd tomb

breadth'd expanse within rust's

       contaminated bone fragments

eradicated sensibilities acquired taste

    ash dusting over determined intentions

machinations within human's refinery

   twisted queer by burnt orange clockworks

destined to live and die in systematic 

                       abstruse calculations

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

// woke up in a catacomb'd tomb
breadth'd expanse within rust's
contaminated bone fragments
eradicated sensibilities acquired taste //

Such a deep write Frieda, ooooft! I adore this song, it is one of my favourites of all time. You have me singing and jazzing away to it, aha.

Flip flops & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Ha I would have loved to see you jazzing peanut....thanks so much, great song, you have to move when you hear it! ;-)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A magical and almost receptive piece that leads one by the hand.

[Frieda P]

Thanks, muchly appreciated.

[Blue]

"dulling senses of time's credibility" I like this line.

You know I love your poems, Frieda, and you're an amazing writer.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Azrel, you're very sweet to say. You have amazing talent for someone your age, you far surpass'd me, I can only imagine how you'll bloom in a few years.

[Blue]

I'll probably bloom as a cactus. Ha. :P Thanks a lot, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Ha, I like your sense of humor too! ;-P

[Tai Ryens]

A dragon surrounded by the atomic cloud of a bomb recently detonated, unable to perform the natural talents of a majestic beast because of situation itself. I like this, I'm able to project myself into this

[Frieda P]

Had a feeling you might like this one Tai, thanks so much for sharing your thoughts.

[Rob Santana]

This is deep. "Woke up in a catacomb'd tomb" my favourite line. Still searching for a way out....Helluva piece Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rob, had a feeling this was your kind of read, must be why you came to mind when I pen'd it...

[Mark]

Seems very stream of consciousness. A sense of impending doom. Maybe it's all the apostrophes.

[Frieda P]

Sigh...

[Bluefire]

This is just as good as radioactive, if not better for its elaborate imagery.
Very well done!

[Frieda P]

Why thank you very much Bluefire, muchly appreciated.

[Bluefire]

^^ No problems.

[NeiL ArandA]

Wow ...your style, motif and muse are continuously evolving and morphing. Its taking a new and different metamorphosis ... spicing with background music...You are taking Poetry to a new heights and higher level. Very impressive indeed Ms Frieda !

[Frieda P]

Woo Neil, doing the happy dance to your review, thanks so much my friend! :-)

[Brittany Zedalis]

I love this poem immensely. It is just brilliant. And I also love that song xD

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Brittany, great song. ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

The dragon can be the mind, the fire are the raging thoughts, the twisting are the agonies of tombs. A great poem and metaphor...:)..................

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly, enjoy'd your interpretation Sami :-)

[Sami Khalil]

ou are welcome muchly...:)..............