Twist'd Dragon Fire~

Dragons breathe fire

    within gray matter

igniting an apocalyptica

     of monstrosity's magnitude

drenching beads of sweat'd contrition

       in contaminated danger's rush

radioactive particles fall

    'tween red paint'd eye squints

dulling senses of time's credibility

     woke up in a catacomb'd tomb

breadth'd expanse within rust's

       contaminated bone fragments

eradicated sensibilities acquired taste

    ash dusting over determined intentions

machinations within human's refinery

   twisted queer by burnt orange clockworks

destined to live and die in systematic 

                       abstruse calculations

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

// woke up in a catacomb'd tomb
breadth'd expanse within rust's
contaminated bone fragments
eradicated sensibilities acquired taste //

Such a deep write Frieda, ooooft! I adore this song, it is one of my favourites of all time. You have me singing and jazzing away to it, aha.

Flip flops & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Ha I would have loved to see you jazzing peanut....thanks so much, great song, you have to move when you hear it! ;-)

[Praveeta]

A thought provoking poem on the ongoing battles occurring in the mind. Your writing is amazing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Praveeta, you're too kind, glad you enjoy'd.

[Praveeta]

Your work is commendable talented friend.

[Frieda P]

You humble me, thanks again my friend. :-)

[DIVYA]

Dragons breathe fire

within gray matter

igniting an apocalyptica

of monstrosity's magnitude"

"If someone had to ask what on earth is most dynamic, I would say the human mind...
Countless battles are fought and won or lost, innumerable apocalypses faced and survived inside it and the remarkable thing is that it dusts itself and still goes on...

A very deep and thinking poem for me.

[Frieda P]

I would agree with you there, some more than other's...thanks so much, always appreciate your thoughts Divya...

[Lyn Anderson]

Jack said it all again. However, breadth'd confused me - I was thinking it was breath'd, but not entirely sure ...

[Frieda P]

Was thinking along the lines of dimensions, hey I just write em, I can't always splain them Lucy....

[redflutterby]

Hmmm..the title may refer to dragons but im feeling something very industrial here. The world and everything in it as machines...lots of smoke and loud noise. The grinding of a million gears at one time. A place where things are functionary but without emotion and human connection. I don't know maybe its my frazzled mind doing that all on its own...lol!! But I do like it...a lot!! x

[Frieda P]

Smoke and loud noise, sounds like the inside of my head lately, I think life is like that sometimes Red, prefunctional in a non emotional state, we do so much by rote, going through the motions without even thinking so often....thanks, jazz'd you took it there! :-) x

[redflutterby]

Ha...well you never know where im going to take it!!! LOl...or maybe you do. You know me pretty well by now!! xo ;-P

[Frieda P]

Seriously, I had no idea where this one was going, usually I have an idea, but this one had to be the possessed muse's plan.

[redflutterby]

Uhoh...you released the possessed muse. Im scared now...better get my cross and garlic. Oh wait..thats for vampires!! Don't mind my neck being bitten so no need for that stuff!! lmao...;-P

[Frieda P]

Ha get out the garlic and I'll make pasta hahaha

[redflutterby]

Yummmmmm....pasta and neck biting!!!! Hahahaha....

[Frieda P]

Hahaha you're one sick chick hon..............

[redflutterby]

Yeah popular opinion seems to agree!!! Lol.... ;-PPxo

[ron]

Tis reminds me of the movie "Clockwork Orange" not even sure it applies to your poem or if it even makes sense.
You have a ay with words dear Frieda. You are truly gifted.

[Frieda P]

Well they're both freaky I guess, that movie is unsettling to say the least, thanks so much ron.

[ron]

You are maybe only three people who know the movie. Love your choice of music in your poems.

[ron]

Would love to bring some Mead and talk with you one on one.

[Frieda P]

Really, I thought everyone knew Clockwork Orange, it's a modern classic no doubt...

[ron]

I think it was made about the time that one movie about firemen burned books. The main person loved books and escaped across the river to a group of people who memorized classic writing's.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Wow, what did you eat before writing this one? I want some! You dove into complex and refined waters here... even your use of language, while staying true to your signature flair, was all too refreshing! I officially have a poetry crush on this piece! ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, that's a first, nobody's ever had a poetry crush, maybe my poem could go steady with one of yers Travis ;-) Thanks so much, really appreciate your response my joisey neighbor ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Haha we'll have to set them up! ;)

[Frieda P]

Do I get to pick who/which pins my poem? ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Sure, why not?

[Frieda P]

Would have to be the Demons one, we like the darkly side ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Good choice, dark but sincere. ;)

[Frieda P]

My cuppa tea ;-)

[00000000000000000000000..]

POWERFUL!!!!!!!!! Awesome work awesome song:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Jon, jazz'd you enjoyed my friend :-)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Always do:)

[Scott Metro]

Spinning a web of words that trap the reader in your cornucopia of splintered concepts..
Always a treat..a kaleidoscope of brief images.


Scott

[Frieda P]

Woo jazzin on this review Scott, it's like poetry :-)

[Scott Metro]

..just for you...

[Ruth]

What is so beautiful about this, is the universal quality, just magnificent love...entwined and engulfing, woven and bursting, superb xox

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Poppy, love 'woven and bursting'! xox

[Archangel Gabriel]

Burning thoughts that overwhelm one and drain the energy, the life force. They twist and explode inside your head but no matter how we try we can't solve the puzzle. The feeling in this is of being persecuted by thoughts and not knowing how to end or understand what they mean. At least it made me think!

[Frieda P]

If I can get the Archangel to think, that's something, thank so much Gabe!