let your heart call out

i will stand by you as a guardian

When trouble is all you know,

Let your heart call out,

I’ll be right beside you,

 

When you stand at the edge ready to jump,

Let your heart call my name,

I’ll catch you and fly you to the ground,

 

When sadness takes over,

and tears fall from your heart,

I’ll hold you tight in a feathered embrace,

 

When your dreams are full of shadows,

And your heart screams in fear,

I will lay beside you till the morning sun rises,

 

When you feel that you don’t belong in this world,

I’ll come before your heart calls,

Show you the love that I feel,

Give you a reason to live,

 

When the time comes for the light to leave your eyes,

and your heart can no longer call to me,

I'll take you into my arms and fly you to gates of heaven,

for to be without you is a fate worse then death.

Author's Note

please re read pleasssse:P

Reviews

[Esana Bridges]

Second to last stanza, first line "fell" --> "feel".
Your info bar "I well stand by you as a guardian" --> "I will stand by you as a guardian".

It's very sweet, and it makes me wish that I could find a love like this. I love your repetition of "When". You portrayed true love very well - always there for somebody, there when you need them, there before you need them, always there, even when someone is gone. I also like the idea that your "heart" can call out - love is something that doesn't have to be vocal.

[Sylvia E. Lioness]

So sweet--it was beautifully writen. The theme of love and selfless caring is so pure and powerful.

[Alyssa]

I really enjoyed this, great read. It's very sweet. Only thing I'd say to maybe think about changing is the "Let your heart call out" line thats repeated three times but not in the rest of the poem, it might flow a little better if it was there throughout or just once.
Enjoyed :)

[Wolfwind]

Absolutely beautiful! Wonderful words that weave hope, joy and compassion all into the protective arms of a guardian. Excellent craftsmanship!

Aaron

[MetBySunlight]

Such a beautiful piece (:

[13ReasonsWhy]

i loved it. beautiful.

[Krystyna Herst]

I really liked this piece. It seems like the character is a very trustworthy person.

[Time's The Bond]

Its so romantic and sweet

[Jesse Jacques]

its so sweet. awesome

[Rowan Storm]

My heart cried once.

[Esana Bridges]

Last stanza, first line, second to last word "you" --> "yours" I think
Last stanza, third line, consider capitalizing "i'll"

The last stanza is so beautiful - so, so beautiful - to find someone that you can't live without, with whom it would be better to die with then live without is a concept that is explored so often and yet there is nothing that can really express that intense emotion. I think that it's one of the most beautiful concepts in the world, and really, it's so beautiful.