I Won't Say The Obvious Things

Honey, hold my hand,

Take me serious,

"Take this pain and

Call me fearless."

Baby, I'm so serious.

"Its so sweet how you never look away"

"When I'm trying to hide"

"And how you softly break

My perfect disguise"

As if I was an actor

On your stage

"You've given love,"

And packed it away.

I'll want you someday .....

"Someday."

So hold my heart,

Please take me serious.

"Take my hands and wear this...

This one ring."

Darling its our everything.

 

Author's Note

Okay so italics is her thoughts, and if the line is italicized and in quotes it's her words,
Quotes are his words,
And normal is what they are both thinking.
This is the first time I've tried anything like this, so I really need some feedback.
I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[KAREN]

BEAUTIFUL!!! The style and flow is great!

[Michael.]

I like how you mixed the different fonts or whatever together.
That was creative.

[J.A.N]

God, this is so emotional.
And I love this style, it's new to me.
The way you wrote this, intriguing.

[Calypso]

Well written and very sad. Bravo

[These Haunted Hallways]

Hey, this was really cool! Have to admit that it was excellent for your first time. Nice job! :)

M.

[Moflo]

I like the format of this a lot! You demonstrate the dilemma really well and the emotions are very clear and well displayed. Good write.

[littlelilypurplebride]

Oh i just fell in love with this
it's so tender sweet in lovely like newly wedds asking for ones hands in marriage for the first time. i am in love with love a romantic here lol.. this is going into my reading list thank you for sharing. god bless lily

[KatiePie]

You know that I love every letter that you write, but this is emotional on a whole new level. Whose head are you inside of?

[Janna]

This is amazing, it had me tearing up a little, I love how you showed her thoughts it helped connect to your character and the situation.

[dukovan]

Ahhhh, I got it before I read your note! Somewhat you clarified it for me, but this is impressive, this is you getting down to the core of human emotion, and proving that it is not black or white, wonderful first try, please try this style again. You could make some magic.