Spit And A Spat

Fight between husband and wife! (Creative Poetry Group)

 

Symphonic mouths spill cruel words that

ricochet back and forth.

Daggers go deep into the abyss of hearts

where angry crimson blood pools.

Curt attitudes become a hurricane,

demolishing vows taken.

Pretentious eyes glare at one another.

 

Apprehension moves in as he walks out.

Emotions burst like a dam.

Her life swings from a pendulum of misery.

His absence tangle with the fear of forever.

 

Anger becomes an inferno of hot tears.

Thoughts grasp her brain.

Reality sets in.

Will he come back?

 

Doubts speak through a metallic

intercome of worry.

Her being is capacity of remorse.

Words he still loves me becomes her repetition.

Coherant fades as time passes.

 

She dresses in his shirt.

His scent causes a hypnotic state.

She wraps his sleeves of embrace around her.

Unearthly dreams fill her slumber.

Will he be back?

 

Lights intrude the darken room.

They meet at the door of forgiveness.

Their bodies silhouette into one.

Love is stenciled in the lining of their heart where forgiveness ignites.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Maya Storm]

Best line from a poem I've read all day "Her life swings from a pendulum of misery." I liked the design of the piece, you laid it out well. Overall it was pleasant to read.

I liked that you spoke of "he" in the upper paragraphs and then you spoke of "she"... you then brought them together at the end 'where forgiveness ignites.'.

An argument turned into a discussion ending with heart felt apologies. WELL DONE!!!

[Krystal Nicole]

I love it!! So beautifully written! Great job!

[Ladysue]

ah you have captured this dance...good ending. nicely done..

[knowman]

I think this writer is or was married, at least it reminded me of my marriages. Great write.

[Star Wolf]

This is very emotionally powerful! The emotions just about leap off the page. I'm glad they had a happy ending. This is really awesome!

[Jeremy Baker]

Very emotive, and assured in its style. Great use of words, too. One very minor nit - "intercom" doesn't have an 'e'. Otherwise I loved it!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Flames of passion explode all over this piece.
Nice work. You capture the elements of human
emotion with ease.