Smudge

Sometimes he could be just as charming.

"There's a smudge on your cheek, darling", said the handsome male in a suit and tie.

"Do you mind removing it for me?" Replied the woman in a long silky gown.

"No problem at all, milady."

the handsome young male reached in to his pocket for a handkerchief, and to his surprise, found none. The young woman stared in wonder as the male stood from his sit and dashed to the opposite direction, shouting "MOM, I NEED A NAPKIN!". A strong woman then emerged from a door beneath a beautiful home, handed the napkin to her son and replied, "Here you go. You play nice with the neighbor now, honey. I'll call you when snacks are ready."

"Thanks, Mom!" Shouted the male as he ran off to his playmate to hand the napkin.

Author's Note

My try on another short story. I'd actually love to hear honest feedback, since I wrote this from the word in oneword.com and I don't think I'm rather good in creating short stories yet.

Reviews

[Persona]

I don't get it. Are they two separate situations? What are you trying to communicate? I don't have any emotional response to this.

[Rhianne Ney]

I found the guy as a mother's boy. He really called out for his mom, lolz

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the story. People with class do need help from their mother. A very nice ending to a excellent short story.
Coyote

[Pax]

haha... sweet and innocent... i find it really cute... like puppy love... adorable!

[Areeba]

It's really good, a completely unexpected ending, well done!

[Jem Sagcal]

Thanks! I always appreciate your reviews!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol it is cool :) love it! clever :) it is engaging and brilliant! keep writing my dear.

[Jem Sagcal]

Thank you so much for seeing it that way!

[quinfinn]

clever little story indeed, i never saw the end coming. nicely done!

[Jem Sagcal]

Hoped for it to be, thank you!