agoraphobia.

lying on the bed

our legs entwine instinctively

in geometric perfection;

head upon your shoulder

while your fingertips trace

lazy syllables

of words

only we two know

Reviews

[Gandré]

I am listening to your song (through youtube, this application would not let me due to licensing restrictions in Germany).. a nice relaxation, and it goes so well with your poem!

our legs entwine instinctively
in geometric perfection;------------------ here my association is: they have the perfect relationship, everything is flowing. Makes me also feel good.

your fingertips trace
lazy syllables----------------such a transience.. and momentary variations are magic 1+1 makes 1.

This not outspoken around in this action - makes the poem special, the reader can feel what is happening yet the poet is not telling me any facts, and so, the feeling reading this is like being in their web and yet not having any interference, it is irrational dreaming in their dreaming. such a gem of poem, once again.

[Jonathan Ballam]

Your opening 'chapter' is most probably the most vibrant in my opinion. I enjoyed the playful words falling and knocking into each other. Lazy syllables, is a wonderful image.

I've been a bit absent from WC, been wrestling with Real Life. All I can say is it's good to be back. Great write indeed ;)

[paul]

wow. extraordinary

[rash]

nice. i really like your work. you seem in love. which is awesome and defiant.

[Nobody.]

powerful piece. Very intimate and interesting. the title indicates something deeper than I see, though. makes me wonder. great poem.
cheers!

[JelliFyshKissUs]

I was thinking of doing something similar to this. But after reading and listening to this priceless gem of lyrical bliss, I wouldn't dare attempt it. Wonderful, Jenny. Makes my bones ache with desire.

[alan peter kelly]

yes....what is there to say when words fail?

This is very nice, and wildly sentimental. Thanks

[Robin]

I like it!

[Crowley]

Why didn't I see these before...very cool. I love the song and the poem is wonderful. Made me think of words that I have shared with others that only we thought we knew. Great idea here.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow. I think I need a glass of water.