agoraphobia.

lying on the bed

our legs entwine instinctively

in geometric perfection;

head upon your shoulder

while your fingertips trace

lazy syllables

of words

only we two know

Reviews

[Gandré]

I am listening to your song (through youtube, this application would not let me due to licensing restrictions in Germany).. a nice relaxation, and it goes so well with your poem!

our legs entwine instinctively
in geometric perfection;------------------ here my association is: they have the perfect relationship, everything is flowing. Makes me also feel good.

your fingertips trace
lazy syllables----------------such a transience.. and momentary variations are magic 1+1 makes 1.

This not outspoken around in this action - makes the poem special, the reader can feel what is happening yet the poet is not telling me any facts, and so, the feeling reading this is like being in their web and yet not having any interference, it is irrational dreaming in their dreaming. such a gem of poem, once again.

[J.Black]

Brilliant. So simple yet it speaks volumes. What an image JW.

[Iota]

Yes, that is a great connection between two lovers. I love how music goes hand in hand with poetry, even how it can inspire flowing words to match it. This little scene you described is like the after glow of love. Excellent~

[mope]

an elegant simplicity

[Devons]

I'm afraid I wasn't permitted to hear the music, but I wouldn't want to in any case.. I think that words should stand alone.. But these are very good words, and the poem captures the vitality of a moment of carnal affection and indeed encompasses a world of moments such as these that anyone may have also experienced. Although it is superficially a somewhat affectionate (not love!!) piece, it has a sensuality -if not sexuality- which gives it an overall sense of reality through closeness... and a passing feeling of spirituality between two sexes.

[DavidRyanM]

Brilliant. The complete sexiness as a whole in this piece...silent yet in the forefront.

[Ed Hart]

i know those words...well, i used to know them before i got old...now, i just remember them

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

*smiles..fukin awesome jennie..
i suggest laura marling...do listen to her when you can..