discernment

discernment

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2011

"
you are my casualty, your eradication
my sojourn in your country 
has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace
your pallet of a thousand stakes
my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom
but I will believe in you now, now that its over
now that its murder 

© 2014 joshua deathdealer


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I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

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I love the second stanza. It's very vivid and it's in the reader's face. Very good :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yikes, this freaks me out. The vividness sends chill bumps down the spine.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the second stanza is my favorite

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh yes.. very nice.. murder with class..

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it!!! you normally don't find writing like this!!! Very good, I'm impressed!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You know I dig this. :)
Raw, severe, in the reader's face.
My kinda poetry bro.
Solid stuff.
Cheers!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is amazing, i can tell you feel soo much :) good job! keep writing :)

-Shelby ^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Imagery is awesome

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joshua...your depth of emotion seems limitless. Understanding of all types can be a blessing and a curse.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a good write. It was entertaining for me. Last line stuck out to me...hmm murder in the first degree. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on May 25, 2011
Last Updated on August 5, 2014
Tags: discernment, death, poetry

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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