discernment

discernment

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2011

"
you are my casualty, your eradication
my sojourn in your country 
has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace
your pallet of a thousand stakes
my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom
but I will believe in you now, now that its over
now that its murder 

© 2014 joshua deathdealer


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I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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great write,excellent words and the last stanza rocks,nice job

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short but striking!
"but I will believe in you now, now that its over
now that its murder "
:)))
Amazing! ♥ it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A heartfelt poem. I like it.....especially the last stanza...... ^^,

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love this, it rocks!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great placement of words,
the last stanza was killer my friend!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

viva la joshua :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

strong poem, you flowed nicely. This was awesome : "this com mixture was difficult to fathom but I will believe in you now, now that its over now that its murder"

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Like Elijah, I too will spend the night musing about this poem's true meaning.

I usually like criticizing something of each piece that I review, but this is too good to do so.



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

'smothering embrace' adore this one.
This has a taste of creation and shows a really vast imagination.
demands rereading.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 25, 2011
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Tags: discernment, death, poetry

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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