discernment

discernment

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2011

"
you are my casualty, your eradication
my sojourn in your country 
has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace
your pallet of a thousand stakes
my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom
but I will believe in you now, now that its over
now that its murder 

© 2014 joshua deathdealer


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I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

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very gangster, different!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Interesting short write, i like the ending, it has a impact.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Many different layers of meaning here - very well crafted!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I reread this 3 times. And each time I see a different metaphor, a different meaning. Now that it's murder...you've washed your hands clean! What a thought-provoking write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The words strong and direct. Each set of lines can stand on their own. I like the beginning. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

enjoyable and a spiral of a poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was a nice poem not in a sense but, deep with a little rhyme flow for such a short poem that spoke so much with a very extensive vocabulary. Anyways well done I really like this. (to my library.)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love the poem with wisdom to all that read between the lines. Nicely done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very catchy poem:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vague but I like it :) last stanza kicked a*s and the flow is impeccable as always! Brilliant write Joshua, thanks for posting this..I love reading your stuff

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 25, 2011
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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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