discernment

discernment

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2011

"
you are my casualty, your eradication
my sojourn in your country 
has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace
your pallet of a thousand stakes
my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom
but I will believe in you now, now that its over
now that its murder 

© 2014 joshua deathdealer


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I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very nice. I learned a new word: pallet!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

!_! Murder. Hehe, I like this one..

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

F****n' epic and endearing!
The three stanzas that you wrote are pleasing and explain so many things in small words. :)


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this! :D it's full of raw emotion and power. Great job :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"My surface dies underneath your taste." that line was gold. I like poetry that tells a story that requires interpretation. I'll be trying to unearth the buried meaning in this poem for the rest of the night lol

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

this poem leaks emotion and the tears land on the reader... great work!! :))

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem may be short, but has a lot of feeling. I really like it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is nicely written, I like how you captured falling away from the old and becoming something new.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

O.o frightening....

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice. Sounds like you are falling away from something old and are about to embrace something new. It's ethereal the way you described this fall.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 25, 2011
Last Updated on August 5, 2014
Tags: discernment, death, poetry

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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