the greedy dragon

the greedy dragon

A Chapter by joshua deathdealer
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12/2011 (Fantasy Installment Four)

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Wyvern rule the skies this far out
Circling battles wage behind the 
gold dragon as his massive wings
slices though the frigid morning 

After weeks of marauding the
ports and shoreline cities of
the south, the treasure laden 
behemoth was lair bound

He had flown quite a distance
and now before him lay the
immense frozen sea, the last 
hurtle before his cavernous home

His squat rider suggests tossing
some of the heavy loot that is tied
securely around the dragons waist
To help relieve his strained flight 

Nonsense, he snorts and maneuvers
over the vast body of frozen waves
Pushing his aching wings he climbs
high and speedily towards looming cliffs

The weight of precious stones and
countless gold bars begin to take an 
evident toll on the laboring beast
His breath shudders under the stress

The air around the greedy dragon 
slows, his shoulders lock and he starts 
to plummet towards the unforgiving icy expanse  
Screams are replaced by a sickening thwack 

      


© 2011 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
"Shall it profit a man, if he shall gain the whole world, and lose his own soul?"

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Dear joshua deathdealer,

The last stanza is a little confusing. Who's screams? The rider and the dragon? Did they both fall? The fight of the dragons must symbolize the dog-eats-dog thing going on in our society today. You seemed to have made the man considerate, which is opposite of greedy, though? Is it the greediness of the dragon that causes the fall? Then what's the point of the man? Or are the two one like the werewolf where there is conflict between beast and man?

I liked this line, though, "the heavy loot that is that is tied securely around the dragon's waist" to show that our security in riches often leads us to a fall because they provide no security at all, for riches eventually fail us.

Thanks for sharing!

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I like the ending. Greed will take down a man. Could be the same for a Government? A very well written tale. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


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It shall definitely not profit man...........excellent moral to this wonderful story..........

Posted 9 Years Ago


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*Enchanted* =) Love it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Absolutley enchanting. A true gem. One to be truly proud of, from teh language and imagry to the story line. Sheer perfection

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Descriptive in its entirity of dragoons and thwack ;)

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the well known proverb"greed is sin and sin is death"...and the central character is the dragon from Harry Potter...but is it the hungarian horntail,the norwegian ridgeback, the romanian longhorn or the albino that harry flew ?? :) :)...wonderful creativity...loved every bit of it !

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Very nice capture into the fantasy world with a dragon... enjoyed. I haven't read many fantasy writes with a dragon, nice.

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BRAVO!! BRAVO!! **THROWS ROSES AT YOU**
great imagery
great message
great word play
you are just the coolest Mr. man eva!!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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It profits the man nothing. Guess he should have listened and rid himself of some of the loot...! Awesome write and pretty unique...!

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This is great! Love it!

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