CLOUD!

I've been thinking of war - as a state of society and how it affects us, this is my collective thought.

Clouds fill cells craving times once gone,

Clear skin holds tales as old as Adam,

Counting nuggets of gold along the way,

Clicked fingers to passers-by can’t fathom.

 

Loud noises heard miles away are here,

Leaning forward for them to see me cry,

Left side, right side, which side is right?

Lonely men standing tall wait to die.

 

Outrage at women taking up arms in haste,

Ordinary life’s changed forever in time,

Ousted secrets seem frivolous don’t they?

Old generals must now come to terms with their crimes.

 

Under earth we bury flesh we once ate,

Usher the new man to tell us old commands,

Uprising's are coming we all know it’s true,

Unite my darlings I beg of you makes demands!

 

Doubt creeps in forever no matter how clear,

Desolate thoughts scratch temples to defend,

Double your efforts he told me or face your foe,

Deals made will never stop the inevitable end.

Author's Note

Enjoy and be honest.

Reviews

[quarintine_deathangel]

If you believe as far as Adam then you know the human race failed once XD the end is only inevitable if we don't wish to change it. Fight forthe good instead of mourning the evil and corrupt it's "The Good Left Undone"(Rise Against) that we should really consider. One of my personal favorite parts in the Bible is revalations when it explains the seven churches. Each was right in it's own vision but had a tragic wrong. I see it as a realization and humbling more than depressing, it says what not to do y'know? Inspiring and motivational I guess :3 so yeah if you wanna check that out..Revalations 1:4-3:22 it's interesting to analyze even if you aren't a Christian. Hope that helps! As always thankyou for writing, I love reading your work ^.^

[Aethereal]

Some people think that God's always on the side of the army who wins, and thus has the power to destroy all definitions of God other than their own.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

True, thank you

[Rita L. Sev]

Left side, right side, which side is right?
Lonely men standing tall wait to die...

These lines were most powerful for me - in war, we are told which side is right - but we don't always know the whole story... and a soldier longs for home, knowing he may never see it again...The whole ordeal is indeed ambiguous to outsiders - cloudy...

I like the construction of this poem using alliteration.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Rita, I'm glad you enjoyed it, it's one of my few pieces that really speaks to me as the author.