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Not sure what to call this poem. got any idea? let me know please

I walked right past you

And sat by the door

You looked at me

Then looked some more

 

I looked back at you

Then finaly

You walked over

And sat with me

 

I got closer

Then took off my hat

I turned to you

Put my arm behind your back

 

I was finally getting to hold you

I was finally getting to be with you

But then I woke up

And I wasnt sure what to do

I should have known

It was just a dream

You're so far away

We won't ever be

 

Author's Note

This actually was a dream. I dreamed it up and was disapointed when I woke up

Reviews

[Brighid an Lasair]

The dreams that seem real tend to leave you with that sense of disappointment when you wake, usually because it involves something that you want so deeply that it becomes a defining factor in who you are.

[Uniqe In Many Ways]

I hate when i have those kinds of dreams. Makes me kinda sad. But great poem! You did great as always!! :--^D

[Tim]

I don't know why dreams do that. Just when it's getting good it's back to reality.
Sorry your dream guy was only with you a short time. Maybe he'll come back another night, Ha Good poem.

[Scooter]

This was sad, I'll say that for sure. Dreams leave us disappointed a lot of the time and I like how you showed that in this poem. The only thing I can say spelling-wise is that the first time you used 'finally', you spelled it with just one 'l'. An easy fix.

Still, this was very nice, sort of a bittersweet, although it's more in a reverse order, isn't it? Good job!

[kuru]

this was like a song...you should add a chorus or something cause this already has like a nice rhythm to it

[Sports Girl]

Good poem. It sucks that it was a dream. But either way it made a good poem.

[Joy]

I like the rythym in this poem. Easy read, good job :)

[Steve]

Very sweet! I hate when i wake up......