Can you see how I feel?

Can you see how I feel?

A Poem by Kyle
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These try to express strong feelings I had for someone about 6 years ago. I was conflicted since she wasnt free to be involved.

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It is so obvious I am sure
The way I feel about you 

Do you notice though my eyes?
Can you see how I feel?

I don't see others only you
I always listen to you, your voice 

When you are around no one else is
When you speak all is quiet

When you feel something I do too
When you want an opinion I take your side

When you look at me I am calm and alive
When you walk into a room no one else is there

When you need something I am there
When you ask I always answer

When I leave for a while I worry about you
Are you going to be ok? Do you need me for something?

When you are not ok I notice right away
When you are upset I ask if I can help

When you laugh I look at your face 
When you frown I see your sad eyes

I want you to know How I feel
I want to know could you feel the same?

I'm afraid you may want another another man
Could this be true? This would hurt me so much

When you are somewhere else I am with you
When I am away You are always with me

When will I be able to tell you? Of my true love for you?
What will you say To my expressions of love?

© 2011 Kyle


Author's Note

Kyle
This is straight from my heart.

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In the third to last stanza you repeated the word "another" twice. Unless that was intentional. Anyway, this was a beautiful write, and I loved how you posed a situation and ended it with a respnse:
"When you look at me I am calm and alive
When you walk into a room no one else is there

When you need something I am there
When you ask I always answer"

I thought it was great!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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You posed a problem from your heart and created such a beautiful poem from it. The questions keep a reader asking for more, and it's just a great piece! I love it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Allyson Wolfe

7 Years Ago

That's more than ridiculous. I would be quite upset! Ha.
Kyle

7 Years Ago

I was shocked! It isnt true..since its been 5 years since i have even seen her....and cant believ.. read more
Allyson Wolfe

7 Years Ago

It's beyond aggravating. I'm sorry that happened to you!
You can tell this is straight from the heart! Did you mean to repeat the "another another" in the 3rd from the bottom stanza? Great job

Posted 7 Years Ago


Emotional read here, well written

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very relatable and raw. Beautifully written lines that are quite obviously from the heart. :) I loved it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


so personal and beautiful. i think a lot of people feel this way but don't have the words to say it like you do. I'm sure many people can connect. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


When you are somewhere else I am with you
When I am away You are always with me
..............lovely lines, I like this poem. Good write. With regards.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful love poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful and touching expression of feeling. I can tell it's heartfelt. Unrequited love can be bittersweet. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is so much feeling, love it! I think that all this could be read in facial expressions with how simple it's written. Well done :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


very nice

Posted 7 Years Ago



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