I've rated you 95/100 mainly due to the fact that 100/100 would be the best piece I've ever read. And I haven't read nearly enough to be able to rate this as my favorite. BEFORE I LOSE MY TRAIN OF THOUGHT, what had caught my attention were the lines
"But most will never know
what it is they truly look like
thanks to certain types of people
under certain kinds of light
and the precious few who look the same
under daylight or the night"
What was your interpretation of the day and night concept? Are they hiding in plain sight? With alterior motives, and tricks up their sleeves?
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
Tricks up their sleeves? Absolutely.
But they are not hiding. Most people are never.. read moreTricks up their sleeves? Absolutely.
But they are not hiding. Most people are never really tested. Most people who are don't really perform. When you find someone who is steadfast and faithful regardless of the circumstance you hold onto that person. That is a skill you cannot really teach.
2 Years Ago
You never really get to see how someone truly acts until to see both sides of their coin or, in this.. read moreYou never really get to see how someone truly acts until to see both sides of their coin or, in this matter, in Day & Night.
Interesting and powerful. I like the repetition of the word "certain" because it pinpoints what is said about various people and ways, plus it's just a pretty-sounding word. You build with contrasts to something (some people) you see as consistent in the last couple of lines. I like that choice - to tell about opposites until you're ready to say what you find particularly rare and steady. Good.
Oh sometimes people are very talented at changing their light to suit circumstance and and I know I have been fooled by some but maybe that says more about me than them. Good write!
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Life is a strange place to spend your time. How you take it is more important than how it's given. .. read moreLife is a strange place to spend your time. How you take it is more important than how it's given.
Loved reading your poem. Haven't been on Writers Cafe. So just getting back in things.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Good to see you back.
Don't let this poem spoil you... there are actually pretty good.. read moreGood to see you back.
Don't let this poem spoil you... there are actually pretty good writers here. Most sites go out of there way to monetize everything, even a "like" might cost you. But not here.... it's basically a free for all. And you really have to piss a lot of people off to kicked.
I love this place. It's not fine but it's pure... and that's very hard to come by.
Truly good leadership is hard to find. That's ultimately what this was about. A true leader perfo.. read moreTruly good leadership is hard to find. That's ultimately what this was about. A true leader performs under any kind of circumstance.
Contrast, it's important, live in full spectrum on both sides of the coin, honor it all, the good the bad, the dark the light.
“Light thinks it travels faster than anything but it is wrong. No matter how fast light travels, it finds the darkness has always got there first, and is waiting for it.”
― Terry Pratchett, Reaper Man
Interesting to consider at all that light may "think", something to ponder in the electrical storm we may call thought.
I've rated you 95/100 mainly due to the fact that 100/100 would be the best piece I've ever read. And I haven't read nearly enough to be able to rate this as my favorite. BEFORE I LOSE MY TRAIN OF THOUGHT, what had caught my attention were the lines
"But most will never know
what it is they truly look like
thanks to certain types of people
under certain kinds of light
and the precious few who look the same
under daylight or the night"
What was your interpretation of the day and night concept? Are they hiding in plain sight? With alterior motives, and tricks up their sleeves?
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Tricks up their sleeves? Absolutely.
But they are not hiding. Most people are never.. read moreTricks up their sleeves? Absolutely.
But they are not hiding. Most people are never really tested. Most people who are don't really perform. When you find someone who is steadfast and faithful regardless of the circumstance you hold onto that person. That is a skill you cannot really teach.
2 Years Ago
You never really get to see how someone truly acts until to see both sides of their coin or, in this.. read moreYou never really get to see how someone truly acts until to see both sides of their coin or, in this matter, in Day & Night.