Polyambiguity

No punctuation to add to the confusion

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Here’s a plastic thought

Another daydream for the heap

No molded rhyme this time

Just a smooth sheet of metaphor

Overstretched and gaping allusion

A wrapper for recycled thoughts

And polymemories

Uniquely malformed

A filmy single-use example

Of want degrading love

While time erodes will

For me to wrap my head around

And suffocate

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Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a beautiful exploration of the way that our thoughts and memories can become distorted over time, like a piece of plastic that has been stretched too thin. Your use of language is both evocative and thought-provoking, and I found myself feeling deeply moved by the emotions you convey. The line "A filmy single-use example of want degrading love" is especially powerful - it's a reminder of the way that our desires can sometimes lead us to make choices that we later regret.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[Chris Shaw]

It's all a load of plastic rubbish, isn't it? You know I had to read it four times Mattavelli before the penny dropped :)

Chris

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Christine! :)
I’m shocked that you would suggest that my poem beautiful heartfelt poem is plastic rubbish. Haha
As I wrote, I was picturing an empty plastic bag. It seems we’re choking our planet with them.

[Chris Shaw]

Plastic bags are a curse aren't they? I wouldn't dream of saying your poetry is rubbish :))

[mattavelli]

But you did, and you were right. Haha
I learned that there are tiny plastic particles all around us, even in our blood, building up in our organ tissues.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Interesting wire. Read this more than once. I agree with Pete.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Cyprian! :)

[Pete]

mission accomplished - you left me scratching my head and wondering. very well done in a twisted, uneasy, frustrating sort of way. an uncomfortable but clever write that held my attention from start to finish ... :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Pete! :)
I was reading about plastic pollution a few days ago, and this beautiful flower blossomed from that. Haha

[Ken Simm.]

For me this is an intellegent thoughtful poem that strikes just the mood I want. Excellent work.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Ken! :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

very strong submission. It was like trying to unwrap the mystery of a profound dream. Continued success in your writing journey.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Carlos! :)

[John Cardwell]

Nice! You worked that metaphor into an entertaining, multi-faceted jewel.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, John! :)