Dealing with it

It's always me who's wrong.
It's always me that gets the blame.
Good thing I'm strong,
And can hold everything in and not go insane.

Or else the fighting would begin,
But it doesn't cause I bury my feelings deep.
Ain't that an unoriginal spin.
Cause for most it will continue to steep.

But it won't for me, I'm sure.
For one I'm already insane.
And two I am mature.
I'm sure I can live with a little pain.

I have no one in which to confide.
I'm already going to h***.
So I'm just gonna hide,
And I'm also not gonna tell.

Reviews

[WickedPenWielder]

I think you have something here, very good structure. Only recommendation I would give is try to use a little more word play and metaphors to let the reader feel the pain you feel. Example: "But it doesnt because i bury me feelings deep" Or what I might say: "My feelings locked and hid away deep" . With a little more revision I think thsi has the potential to be a great piece, and is good in its self. Keep writing and let your emotions stain your paper and leave the reader breathless!

[lee von cleef]

Just don't let the pin pop your bubble,

[MoriartyMesa]

Minor edits aside, this is nice, loud and clear, what a reader can take away from this is more clear than crystal, enter this into something, its a winner.

[Dennis]

The insane line reminds of the quote from a Lisa Unger book: "Once you've been there you never quite make it all the way back. "
Or something like that. Not really dark; just when you've had a chance to see over the edge. Things become a little clearer. Take a peek, if you dare.
:)

[Kaela]

Genuine, confident and real.

[None]

I like this, but the lines about the speaker being insane and mature don't fit. Sorry. I know that may sound harsh, but the speaker is obviously not that, so it rubs the reader the wrong way. Otherwise, this is so awesome, and ends so sharply. Great write. Good job rhyming. It's hard, but comes naturally to you.

[Laura Maidah]

And you didn't cuss. Lol.. I said I liked that. I guess you understood that?

[Laura Maidah]

Thanks for PMing me. It was in reference to this section:
"ut it won't for me, I'm sure.
For one I'm already insane.
And two I am mature.
I'm sure I can live with a little pain. "

It's a list, an outline. It's almost acting like a verse, without being one. It's the rough draft before the final cut IMHO.

[Laura Maidah]

Very relatable. I'm so glad you opted out of cussing. Sometimes, the poem is just an excuse to cuss. In this case, it really works. I don't like the lists you used. It is distracting, like reading the blueprint of the poem instead of its reality, no?

[bursting colors]

almost everyone can feel this way sometimes

[T. Logan]

I know somebody with this mindset, and he's my best friend. It's a really good poem, and easy to relate with for a lot of people.