A raw, ugly. utterly faithful fall of words, hatred of the living, the dead and the life as yet blistering your ravenous feelings - 'emotions' are too kind a word, whereas feelings dig into every pore of your body here, the fear, the emptiness, the isolation: the wracked intensity of ALL.
There are times when hatred is understandable - no matter who or what you are aiming it to: you need vengeance that, in time. will hit rock bottom then fidget you into life again. Sadly, it is how it is for some - illogical, yes - unseemly, yes.. but human.
the body will rot, the soul will maintain, rise or fall. So they say, but i am in a similar boat as this speaker in the poem. Questioning where it all leads....do we believe in an Entity just hoping this mortal coil when we shed it will not be the end. That there may be something more out there is what we surmise. For what?
To make this life worth it even through all the pain----because everything happens for a reason?
I was reading this thinking of Joan Osborne..."what if god was one of us, a slob like one of us"
and there he was on the bus, and he told me it all was a myth...and i should have taken better care of my teeth.
your work impels replies to scamper from the pen of the reader.
Isn't it strange how we blame people for dying, or maybe dying at the wrong time.
Certain people are needed, just needed to be there to put things right.
I suppose that's why we get angry with the dead, they really do control us at times.
this is so raw. great vent. off the beaten path but enjoyed the strong wording and imagery. clearly from deep within - has to be when mentioning puking. very emotional write. the whole thing is powerful but the ending is explosive ... :)
SO ...you've been doing some purging I see...adore this and I see you have not lost that fountain of emotion that escapes from every line like a winged bat from the cave of poetic hell. Beautiful write..."f*****g" love it~ Thanks again!!
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Oh hey, hahah I guess you checked it out on your own accord...
Sighhh, Dear Poetess 🍂
We both know how unbelievably rare and immensely important finding that perfect special someone to love/to love us back is … most never find their soulmate in a lifetime.
And, when we do, to allow them to become part of our heart and entire being … then, to have them ripped from our very fibre for no understandable or sensible reason, can become almost more than one human being can bear … completely more than far too many can.
Well, truth is, Dear Lady-Poet, despite whatever elegance and skill my words may range into, I could never put it all as deeply touching or poetically eloquent as You have.
The sheer amazement in your originality and creative syntax reads so powerfully I am made to feel your own expressed angst and passion in my core
The vitriolic timbre of:
"you didn’t ask to leave,
He took you,
and he is looking into your eyes, now.
And, I hate you both for it"
Whew! What a thrilling writer you truly are … thank you; I'm smitten! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
You're making me blush! Thank you :) You are so sweet.
The happiest times are the minutes spent in my mind. The most beautiful I have ever felt was in a daydream where I was completely someone else; someone better. And when the truth hits, and my reality.. more..