Secrets Revealed

Bet you didn't see this coming now did you? Let me know what you think and I wanted to know if you were surprised at the end! Enjoy!

His top lips brushed against mine 

Making my body shiver 

He placed his soft, tender lips squarely on mine 

The sensation travel all over my body 

Our tongues met and swirled around 

Mixing his tastes with mine 

Tongue so soft like a cloud 

Gliding in my mouth 

His hands holding me body close to his 

With his other hand in my hair 

Kissing down my neck down to my apple 

Paying special attention to my coo's 

Smiles in between the sounds 

Kissing down toward my belt 

Using his teeth to undo my zipper

Just revealing the color I was wearing

I made a little moan as he went on

Fully okay with the decision he made 

He continued on his exploration of my body

Finding every sweet spot  along the way

Finally taking it no more I shouted "do it"

He teased a little at first 

Lowering what I was wearing to reveal that ...........

I was a man 

Reviews

[Krista Weiss]

Holy crap this poem scared me so much! At first I was like 'oh my gosh this is so cute!' and then I was like 'crap this is a sex poem!' and then I read the last line and I was like 'what the hell just happen!?' hahaha!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Jinkies, kind of confusing poem, from this part am glad he was not a vampire and turned out to be a fruit lover "Kissing down my neck down to my apple". Very good tough. Congratulations.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The scene is funny, I read it again, Great work.

[s y e]

Wow, shocker! Although in a way I kind of expected from your book..... Lol.

~ Noodle.

[Missy Moooooo]

This is awesome to see that someone has written about Guys, because many people think that for poetry you need to have love. But to many the same sex is love. Why must people think this is an issue.

Amazing write. Honest :)

[MandaBear]

Thanks! I am starting to write a book on here about this very topic! I hope you guys like it! (and girls)

[Missy Moooooo]

That's amazing. I was starting to write something about a guy like this in Highschool, But I may just do a female :) Still debating. I have many things to finish before this very topic can even begin to start.

[dw817]

Hokay, someone is in desperate need of a Harlequin Romance novel. Or ... (reading this more carefully) is this love between two GUYS ? Nuuu ! :O

[MandaBear]

Lol I was trying something new and yes your are correct! about the guy part =O

[dw817]

ODear, coming from you - my - I just don't know what to think ... :D

[MandaBear]

lol I am writing a story about it too. So if you dont know what to think now just wait lol

[dw817]

Hoo boy ... I - have to admit I have worked subtle elements like that, for instance, when Dev is dreaming about his girlfriend, but I try to keep it very low key. With your writing, I may need to bring a fire extinguisher to keep things from igniting. *Grin*

[MandaBear]

Lol, Well I hope you like it. I am rewriting it now because I got some really good advice and I am putting it to use. My goal is to actually FINISH this story. Wish me luck! It is a new concept I never really thought about writing about but I guess trying something new every once in a while is a good thing!

[dw817]

All the luck in the world, lass ! ♣ ♣ ♣

[MandaBear]

Thanks!! If you have any suggestions on like how to fix it please let me know!

[dw817]

Will have to see it first. c.')

[MandaBear]

okay =) c(^-^c)