-When I see you-

-When I see you-

A Poem by *Always be Me:)*

When I see you,

My heart starts racing,

As if it wants to jump out of my chest.

 

When I see you,

My eyes never blink,

They stay the way they are.

 

When I see you,

I think of how lucky I am,

To have the most prefect guy.

 

When I see you,

Nothing else is around,

It's just us, on the Earth's ground.

 

When I see you,

I know that our love is true,

Because baby,

When I see you,

My heart is complete.

© 2010 *Always be Me:)*


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This is an interesting poem. You did will with the stanzas, and your emotion is good.

My only suggestion is to change "My eyes never blink," to "My eyes don't blink," simply because the former says that you never blink ever, including when he's not around. It makes the statement flat and trivial.

Other than that, this is a good poem. Good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Very cute hun.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I was told something similar once.....but that was a long time ago
I'm glad you express your feelings so well
he is very lucky=) -Justin

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is adorable! i love it!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Hello, my name is Michaela. I am 28 yrs old and single! I have brown hair and dark greenish blue eyes. I graduated last year....amazing feelings :). I'm 5'3" and I weigh about 140lbs. I love to hang o.. more..

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