Forevermore

Rhyming Quatrains with a Rhyming Couplet envoi poem regarding thoughts of death... Grateful to Richard for finding the perfect artwork for my poem and helping me along my journey writing poetry.

   

     Forevermore....

Lie me down on a bed of lavender;

naked, I will be in the blazing sun.

Upon death, to this earth I surrender …

for, my journey here with you is now done.

Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …

floating along with no care in the world.

As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,

our eyes met softly, as blue waters swirled.

Kissing your salty neck, I held on tight

with loving thoughts....I drift to you again,

watching day's sun disappear into night,

knowing our true love's depth would never wane.

Beyond life, to your open arms I soar;

our souls entwine now ~ and forevermore....

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would so appreciate a review.
I always review.. Each line has 10 syllables.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[C. M. Miller]

Angels folding wings around each other, with feathers to spare. Ethereal. Words escaping me, like a sweet mist kissing memories that never fade. thank you for this write.
UPDATE! 2-23-24: I recently re-read your poem. I am sorry now that I completely missed the pacing of it, the subtle rhyming that I overlooked upon my first read. The ending so subtle and sensual. Beautiful. Thank you, sincerely.

[Lisasview]

Wow, the mere fact that somehow my poem stayed with you and prompted you to reread it is well, rather amazing... Did you read my authors notes about the poem? Basically it said that I wrote this about thoughts of my own death...Hope you will have time to read more. And, I am now going to read yours,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Sami Khalil]

It has beauty. It has class. It has the classic feel. The journey of forevermore starts now. Your style is music to the ears. You are really soaring in love and poetry.

[Lisasview]

Wow, what a lovely thing to say dear Sami..
Thank you so much,
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. I felt it. You are welcome Lisa in Spain.

[Lisasview]

Thank you,
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

::::: )))))))))))))))

[Andrew John]

I see so few Shakespearian sonnets. Pleasure, this one. Lovely place to have softly meeting eyes. So thank you, Lisasview.

[Lisasview]

So very nice to know you enjoyed my Rhyming Quatrain..not really quite a Sonnet... I did actually write a couple of Sonnets for example... Hand~In~Hand that you might like... It was the very first one I ever posted in my life for others to read.
Lisa, now in Spain

[redzone]

a soft and deeply touching love poem Lisa, kudos....

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much...This is about thoughts of my own death...Weird but true..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

There's so much passion in this writing. We hid in deep-sea dark caves..." that line and everything to follow was so well chained together. Wonderfully explained and expressed poem. tyfs

[Lisasview]

Hi Cyprian,
I just noticed that I never thanked you for your lovely review... I really thought I had..so weird..
I feel very passionate about what I write...
This one was about thoughts of my own death... Not sure you read Innocence... quite different from anything I have ever written..
Lisa, on the computer in Spain

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome. Sorry for the late reply. I'm not on here that often.

Different is good. :)

[Lisasview]

I definitely believe that being different is good...
Lisa, quite early in Spain

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa,

Having lost my wife of 49 years this past January, a beautiful girl and woman I had met and loved since she was 15 years old, this piece of your heart set to pen of page speaks to me in ways that I cannot voice, nor express, for the pain remains fresh as though I saw her dying just yesterday ... All I can say is that this poem is poignant and reaches right to my heart in its beauty and expression of undying love ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Good morning dear Marvin,
Just up 6:30 here in Spain...and, reading your review..first one today. I am in tears as I feel your loss so deeply.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. Hope you will read more of mine... I think you might like Forever...similar title..but different..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Lisasview]

Marvin,
I just read your review to my husband and he too was moved deeply by your words...he got chills ...like me...We are so saddened by your loss...
Thinking of you,
Lisa

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham]

Thank you so much, both you and your husband ...

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome

[Lathen Griffiths]

I absolutely adore your writing within this piece, Lisa from Spain, I was enthralled, but please put it in black on white , I truly feel it would add to the gravity of it, wouldn’t change your words of course though , wonderful as they are,

Lathen

[Lisasview]

Good morning Lathen,
I am so delighted that you adore my poem.
Your thoughts about the gravity of the poem being in black and white is interesting and I will think about it. My trademark if one calls it that, is an image in color with all my poems... but as I said I will consider your advice.
Thank you, Lisa, now early morning in Spain

[roarke]

Ah, in a word beautiful. The meter and rhyme very natural and fitting. The second stanza is my favorite.

[Lisasview]

Funny, I just responded to your response on your poem, and gave you a few poems I wrote that I thought you might like to look at and now I see that you have read Forevermore... Thank you so much for your read and review...I so appreciate it.
Lisa, 10pm in Spain

[andrew mitchell]

What the purists would say true poetry. A lovely piece of writing Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Andrew,
Being new to submitting I decided to go the route of "True Poetry" I am working hard to understand how it works...a real challenge... but I love it..
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Lisa, working on a new poem in Spain

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

An endearing piece, full of want, and yet, the security of finding true contentment in another. Love is an incredible thing. This piece will surely stand the test of time, as the title suggests. Well done!

[Lisasview]

Thank you Travis so much for your very kind review and for understanding the meaning of my poem..read moreThank you Travis so much for your very kind review and for understanding the meaning of my poem..
Lisa, working on a new poem in Spain

[Stella Armour]

A beautiful write Lisa, and what more relaxing way to leave this world behind than to lay on a bed of lavender.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Stella for taking the time to read and review my poem.
I really do appreciate it,
Lisa, working on a new poem