Forevermore

Rhyming Quatrains with a Rhyming Couplet envoi poem regarding thoughts of death... Grateful to Richard for finding the perfect artwork for my poem and helping me along my journey writing poetry.

   

     Forevermore....

Lie me down on a bed of lavender;

naked, I will be in the blazing sun.

Upon death, to this earth I surrender …

for, my journey here with you is now done.

Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …

floating along with no care in the world.

As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,

our eyes met softly, as blue waters swirled.

Kissing your salty neck, I held on tight

with loving thoughts....I drift to you again,

watching day's sun disappear into night,

knowing our true love's depth would never wane.

Beyond life, to your open arms I soar;

our souls entwine now ~ and forevermore....

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would so appreciate a review.
I always review.. Each line has 10 syllables.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[C. M. Miller]

Angels folding wings around each other, with feathers to spare. Ethereal. Words escaping me, like a sweet mist kissing memories that never fade. thank you for this write.
UPDATE! 2-23-24: I recently re-read your poem. I am sorry now that I completely missed the pacing of it, the subtle rhyming that I overlooked upon my first read. The ending so subtle and sensual. Beautiful. Thank you, sincerely.

[Lisasview]

Wow, the mere fact that somehow my poem stayed with you and prompted you to reread it is well, rather amazing... Did you read my authors notes about the poem? Basically it said that I wrote this about thoughts of my own death...Hope you will have time to read more. And, I am now going to read yours,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Neville]

one good turn deserves another .. and this one is certainly worthy of my personal re-perusal ...
Neville .. about to tune his mandolin before setting off for the festival .. :)

[Lisasview]

Good morning Neville,
Oh I did not see that you had reviewed this one of mine before?? So glad you came back for a second look... I do appreciate it.
Lisa, 7:30am

[Neville]

you are more than welcome .. my pleasure entirely :)
Neville feeling a little nervous & about to set off for the festival again having agreed yesterday to read some of his poems in the poetry tent

[Lisasview]

Oh my how wonderful..A festival with a poetry tent...
Of course you would be nervous... but that is probably really just covering up excitement.
I see you wrote this yesterday..so how did it go?
L

[Neville]

not too bad at all, thank you for asking ...
Neville, feeling glad its all over till next year

[Lisasview]

Good to hear Neville..
isa, 4:30pm here in Spain

[Crowley]

The mixture of soft words and the tang of reality like the line about the salty neck really make this work well. The whole package is beautiful with the font and the picture...and of course the wonderful words. Great work!

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Delighted to know you enjoyed this...
Not sure if you know or not but my words are about my thoughts about my own death...
Thank you for reading and reviewing.it does mean a lot to me.
Lisa, still in Spain

[Ken e Bujold]

A bloody marvelous old style traditional lyric. From the opening line image of lying in lavender ablaze in the sun I was absolutely enchanted. First thought was of Yeats, but as you progress on it reminded me more of Lawrence.

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness what an astounding review... Comparing me to the greats...
I am new to posting having kept my poems in a drawer for years. I have no education in writing poems or Sonnets.I had never read any poetry until recently....and, had no idea what a Sonnet was until dear Richard contacted me when I posted my first piece, 7 months ago, Hand~In~Hand ,and told me that it was actually a Sonnet, except for the ending lines... He asked if I might like his help finishing it. I of course said yes and I have been under his wing ever since. I have learned a lot..and I love it.
I wonder how you discovered me? And, hope you will find time to read more of mine.
Thank you again!!
Lisa

[Ken e Bujold]

All the more impressive for the short while you have been at it. As to how I found you and your poem, I'm new here, just joined and having posted my first poem I lingered a spell to check out the works of some other writers

[Lisasview]

That is so wonderful to hear Ken...
I am new to posting and that took some getting used to... But I have been writing since I was 10 years old...a very long time..

[Stuart Munro]

Great poem and art work , I like Kissing a salty neck , tho I’ve never had the pleasure , that’s life
I like remember my laughter in the ocean waves , nice line
Well done Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hi Stuart,
I am going back over all my poems to make sure I thanked everyone for reviewing my poems... I was sure I responded to your wonderful review. I clearly remember reading it... so strange. Anyway, thank you so much.
Lisa, still in Spain

[Perry]

Hi Lisa,
I was excited at the prospect of reading your poem "Forevermore". I wasn't disappointed. Your writing is at once beautiful and technically amazing--filtered through the sands of experience. You write as though your abilities are at their reaching their peak. Like a forest at its climax.

Perry

[Lisasview]

Wow Perry, What an amazing review of my poem Forevermore. I wrote this early one morning when thinking of my own death and the words just flowed out of me.
To be excited about reading my poem inspires me to continue writing.
Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to review my poem. Your review is like a poem itself!!
Lisa, now visiting Galicia, Spain

[Vertigo Cat1111]

‘Remember my laughter in ocean’s waves,’ such a chillingly beautiful visual here. In the whole poem, there’s absolutely beautiful visuals that capture that deep loyalty and love. This poem is so passionate and strong, reminding us how love lives on and can still grow and grow after it leaves. This poem has a warm and comforting energy to it, like a hug. It flows smoothly and is absolutely heartwarming. Thank you so much for sharing this lovely piece.

[Lisasview]

Hi Cat, so glad you read and reviewed my poem...means a lot to me...
This poem is about my own death...thoughts about it and the life I now share with the love of my life...
(40 years)
I am happy to know you liked it,
Lisa, in Galicia, Spain

[gram linski]

lovely poem, I really enjoyed

[Lisasview]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. This poem is about thoughts of my death.read moreThank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. This poem is about thoughts of my death.
Lisa, traveling by train in Spain

[Brad Dehler]

Very lovely poem. It is a rapture of delicate delights and soft comfort; beauty surrounds. Thank you for this escapade. Then it transitions into everlasting love and intimacy. Thank you

[Lisasview]

Hi Brad,
Good to see you reviewing... This poem is actually about my death.... I woke up one morning and just wrote down my thoughts..
Glad to know you liked it.
I appreciate your thoughts,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Brad Dehler]

Wow. Another deep layer to it. Thank you

[Lisasview]

Oh I am so glad I let you know… Now if you read it again it will must likely feel different….read moreOh I am so glad I let you know… Now if you read it again it will must likely feel different….
Lisa, still feeling like I am 40!!

[Crosby Idasa]

This poem is nice and touching….

[Lisasview]

Thank you for your very kind review Crosby!
Lisa, now in Spain

[Crosby Idasa]

Nice, hope you’re enjoying the Spanish weather 😊

[Lisasview]

This is the hottest summer so far...Only been here two years...
But certainly enjoying Spain..
Lisa

[W. Barrett Munn]

This poem is primarily lineated with 4-stress lines. A couple of spots may be one word two many but overall a lovely accomplishment.
W.

[Lisasview]

Please send me where there may be a word too many.
This way I can see what you mean.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

I now understand what you were thinking.. However, as I said this is a 10 syllable per line poem... no two ways about it... so I can not just take out a word here and there..
That just would not work.
lisa

[W. Barrett Munn]

You are right. A syllabic constraint means a syllabic constraint.

[Lisasview]

Yep............