this is something that way too many young teenagers are facing!
this poem should be shared on every website in every teen magazine!!
but it isn't always the guy whos the dick and sending them around..my ex best friend...yes the same one who i wrote my poems about... :/ she was and is the biggest guy in the fact that she does this to guys!! she gets them to send her photos of whats in their pants then shows everyone and they all start mocking the guys on size! i think she deserves a smack on the face so should every guy or girl who has ever done such a thing!!!!!!!! what gives them the right to expose someone elses privacy??
It is a real tragic world we live in these days. First rule of thumb, if you don't want everyone in the world to know, don't put it on the computer. A lot of people get really abused by cyberbullies, especially girls. Be careful out there. There are a lot of creepers on the internet. Cherish yourself enough to not seek love from faceless pervs hiding behind a curtain online.
WELL DONE!!
btw i have just shared it to my facebook mates, cause i thought it was just that brilliant and one of the comments made was this:
"Bell Fraser: relatable. i like it. she's simple and direct, but her writing has a nice beat to it which just keeps you reading"
The story in the poem is great and really tells the tale of what happens in a very chronological and poignant fashion. My one suggestion is to rethink some of the lines for awkward phrasing, which happens on occasion when you're trying to force the rhyme scheme. The prime example in this poem, I think, is "In her lungs water fills". It's an awkward construction there to rhyme the line with pills.
29 now. When Did I join this site again? There was a comment I saw from when I was 17 so, at least 12 years. Though, I know it has to be longer than that. A lot has changed... If you aren't new here a.. more..