I Love You Somewhere

The just came to me and it is fitting right now

Hidden beneath the nocturnal realm

Soaring within illusions and dreams

Floating upon midnight moonbeams

 

Sailing across the purple night sky

Whispers call out to their masters

With rapture as the spell casters

 

Bouncing between lucid dreams and thoughts

With an intimate emotional care

I love you passionately somewhere

 

Entangling deep within the soul

Wisps of magical desires do flair

Secret  splendor is sent with care

 

Woven in an enthralling dream

Twinkling with silver delight

As this feeling soars to new heights

 

Bouncing between lucid dreams and thoughts

With an intimate emotional care

I love you passionately somewhere

 

 

Night vanishes with the morning sun

Daydreams created during the day

Vividly come out to frolic and play

 

Imagination comes to life

Pictures are vivid with fiery spice

Melting away enveloping ice

 

Bouncing between lucid dreams and thoughts

With an intimate emotional care

I love you passionately somewhere

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

I love this, your words and descriptions here are very beautiful. I didn't have any trouble with how often you used the word lucid. Your poem has a very mysterious and surreal feel to it, just like a dream. Excellent poem, very beautiful. I'll say it again, I love this!

[al25]

I like the image you created in my mind. Great write.

[Leefi]

Sounds like a long distance relationship, a good one. I see someone far off lighting your fire. Making you lose yourself in a constant dream state.

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep and well expressed ... overall I thought you did a great job on this ...

[Poeticadia]

How love can make us fly! I like the bouyant rhythm and the repeated refrain that strengthens the sense of desire and quickens the pulse of the poem.

[OT]

very nice!! the refrain makes it almost song like - a much lighter and happier write than some of your other stuff - reflecting this cloud surfing you haha - as always your three lined stanzas work well alone and together!! I think the feeling of a missing line between the second and third comes from the fact they lead on to each other very easily whereas the others are more contained - so it feels like a natural stop! but it works regardless - and if you are to remove a lucid - I'd do it from the first line and keep the refrain strong! nice!

[G. Marie"floating on an..]

this is a beautiful poem. i love it! it reads like it could be a song..... good job!!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

TIme and distance can not diluter love... a truley romantic poem.. this is top notch emotion.

[The Perfectionist]

Lucid is too uncommon a word for me not to notice you use it twice within three stanzas. Swap one out for something.

I like the idea of a refrain (and you're right, your form is off), but it just is a strange one. The wording makes it feel like there's something missing; an entire line maybe. I'm not entirely sure what it is, but I got that feeling every time I read it over.

...okay, thought about it a little more. I realize this destroys your three-line pattern, so I don't blame you at all if you don't do this, but my head is demanding a new line in between the second and third. Don't know what it'll say (maybe rhyme with thoughts), but that's really all I can think reading this.

[Nothing Personal]

I love you passionately somewhere.. could be a momentous line..the kind that redefines love..why??? because there's so much love already when you said passionately but 'somewhere' adds all the magic, enigma and gentleness..the love that does not seek but only gives.. It seems all like a spell where deep longing and heartfelt desire evokes a song like this that is sure to beckon the loved , a million miles away. he would see the dry leaves moving away by a gentle wind, and feel a gentle touch , a care and affection sent through invisible cables and will smile thinking about you.. I absolutely adore this..and will put it in my fav's

Sappy?? HELL NO.

[ice]

Very nice, form and story line. Love the title.
I like the repeated verse..it adds a soothing continuety to the poem.
I have bounced between lucid dreams and consious thought myself..in that time when I am not asleep, or awake..in the crack between the two worlds..
where "imagination comes to life" and one can speak to their own spirit.
enjoyed