Blind Irony

A poem about a small girl experienceing blindness and how it effects her outlook. Its about taking things for granted, loss, and appreciation. its a good read so try it out! :-)

 

 

 

Little one
In meadow green
Hides her eyes
Of amazing sheen
Soon they fade
And turn blank white
So now her world
Is only night
Feather blindfold
Flutters down

While she crawls
Upon the ground
She gazes sun-ward
Like a dream
From Pearly eyes
Comes a quiet
Crystal stream

Reviews

[Acer]

Another great pom by you, loved you wordings & oic. as well indeed. Nicely written, you're reaching out. soon you 'll get your successive path...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Lol with any luck! I sure hope it happens like that but there aren't to many truly successful poets these days

[Acer]

yes, i know very well that it's too tough to beat them, but you can, if you want to do, if you've your fire, just burn that fire & run after the success....you can beat easily, because, i've seen your writing, you have some talent i ithink...not think i believe.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Lol I believe it to I just have to out write the critics

[Helena]

Your amazing poem has had some wonderful reviews, and rightly so. Truly superb in every respect!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thank you! :-)

[Relic]

I don't know why anyone would hate their eyes with the exception of all the horrible images that have collected in front of them? (Doctor my eyes--Jackson Brown) This poem is very well written. I like the line: "Feather blindfold flutters down" to describe blindness. It has nice alliteration to it. The poem in its entirety is really well done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thank you. I write with double meanings so it did mean she hated her eyes for what she'd seen but at the same time I was referring to the vanity of young girls and how they always want to change something about themselves

[Relic]

I can see that. (no pun intended) The vanity of young girls certainly is prevalent in society and probably always has been to some degree.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

My original intent was kind the you don't w what you have until it's gone theme you know?

[Relic]

I've experienced that theme before. I can think of a bunch of situations and I can relate it to this poem.

[Lisa Ring]

Ah, you changed your name. I don't see the irony but the imagery is quite beautiful.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

The irony is that she hated her eyes and then became blind its a bitter type of irony but an irony none the less.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Beautiful piece, the imagery is simply superb.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much I'm glad you enjoyed it its a personal favorite if mine

[Sky]

This is a nice poem. Well done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

glad you like it :-)

[Michael Perez]

The best work you have ever written. The vivid imagery is astounding, and the tone and the pace? No one can replicate, just astounding. I have been in the cafe for only like a few days, and this has been one of the best! Kudos to you! by the way, no anime pic aww :P

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww your such a sweatheart!! anyway this was the most accurate pic I could find if you find an anime pic more accurate then I'd gladly replace it :-) You have no idea how much a pleasure it is to hear that you liked it so much that you think it's one of the best really its great!

[Michael Perez]

I might find one! I'll send it to you if I can find an accurate one. Thanks for the great write!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

no prob lol its always a pleasure :-)

[lee von cleef]

Your best, Has all I love.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx so much! It's a personal favorite of mine as well :-)

[Mariah Corey]

You make the words so vivid, the reader see it so clearly. You have just the right words to put things in a line so straight. I love it. :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx this is actually one of my favorites :-) Iv had some critics on it but.. I just love it how it is so much ... I didnt wanna contaminate it with change.

[Mariah Corey]

yea i am glad u didn't change it because its perfect. :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww ur so sweet

[Mariah Corey]

thnx.

[Mariah Corey]

but i was just speaking the truth. :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

and thats the best part! :-D

[Mariah Corey]

:D