Blind Irony

A poem about a small girl experienceing blindness and how it effects her outlook. Its about taking things for granted, loss, and appreciation. its a good read so try it out! :-)

 

 

 

Little one
In meadow green
Hides her eyes
Of amazing sheen
Soon they fade
And turn blank white
So now her world
Is only night
Feather blindfold
Flutters down

While she crawls
Upon the ground
She gazes sun-ward
Like a dream
From Pearly eyes
Comes a quiet
Crystal stream

Reviews

[Heather]

Hannah you're such a lovely poet, every read speaks to me as a reader. This one is beautifully written.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx so much!! Im glad you like my work. This is honestly a personal favorite of mine. probally my only poem I have memorized

[Rtrt]

I enjoyed this, I was just looking for a little more confusion, pain, scared feeling, or something of the likes. Don't get me wrong beautiful, I just know if I lost my vision there would be some freaking out involved. Thanks

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I respect that you would like more emotion but this just wasn't written from that point of view and I was not aiming for ppl tO pity the character but to learn from her hard lessons

[Ryan Halterman]

you write quite well my friend. I likes the way you talks. We do take far too many things for granted. I know I certainly do. Less so since I got sick but I probably still take things for granted without realizing it. But you write quite beautifully though I always thought people named Hannah probably would.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Lol Thanx though I always thought my name was pretty generic. I'm Rly glad you enjoyed it

[The Refined Poet]

wow... beautiful, descriptive...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx! Im glad you like it!

[_]

Its true though how he take our vision for granted ad don't even appreciate the fact that we can experience beauty. An excelletn and legit flow of words! :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much! Im so happy the message came through to you guys! you all make me so happy

[.]

Little one
In meadow green
Where I go in spring! 100/100

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

glad you like it

[.]

:) no problem

[Melody]

This shows such a rough transition from color to dark, from neon to pastel, from alive to death, and to sight to blindness in such a smooth manner. Great job, it was quite enjoyable Hannah. :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx so much Im glad you enjoyed it melody! That was entirely what I was going for

[Melody]

Well, you got it. Thanks for sharing it and you're welcome. :)

[That_Girl]

I really enjoyed this... the transition between sight and blindness was smooth and you ended it well. Lovely piece!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

i'm so glad you could appreciate it! I wrote it the summer of my freshman year.

[That_Girl]

It's very nice. :) You should be proud.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I am its one of my personal favorites and like the only one I bothered to memorize

[MissJune]

This is beautiful.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx!