Tie me off

if you read it, please let me know what you thought about it. thank you

Got a little baggie

hiding in my closet

got a little nagging

deep inside my head

got a little urge

to be what scares me

Dont know how much longer

I can keep it hidden away

tucked behind these skeletons

somewhere in the dark

im drowning in my secrets

This used to be an if

now I think its only when

Tie me off

let me feel

every bit of soul 

I steal

away 

from me

see I think that I can heal

if I can feel

these wounds rip through me

Got a little secret

hiding in my brain

got a little demon

deep inside my head

everything ive ever truly wanted

is enough to make me sick

Dont know how much longer

I can hide it all away

it slips out in each cut I make

and all the letters i never send

in little bits of conversation that you never catch

This used to be an if

but now I know its only when

Tie me off

let me feel

every bit of soul 

I steal

away 

from me

see I think that I can heal

if I could feel

your wounds rip through me

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Indeed, it's song-like.

Reminds me of Iggy Pop's lyric: "America takes drugs in psychic defense."

"Tie me off/let me feel/every bit of soul/I steal/away/from me/see I think that I can heal/if I could feel/your wounds rip through me"

Those closing lines are darkly thrilling and induce heart-aching empathy.

[.ronald.039.]

i liked it. i couldn't tell if it was about drugs or guilt, but i still liked it regardless. it reads like song lyrics.

[luciddreamer]

Interesting write..
"Got a little baggie
hiding in my closet
got a little nagging
deep inside my head
got a little urge
to be what scares me"
Speaks to me....
Peace
Robin

[Ghost]

i like it. it makes me think of drugs, lol. but i like it.

[justice]

Well, the comment of "song-like" is taken. I would definitely throw my hat into that ring as well. It has a wonderful flow about it. The metering is very nice and the word choice is consistent. The images are also very powerful. They really engage the reader and make him think. Overall, this is a very successful poem because of how it connects with the reader. Well done in that regard. Thank you for sharing it here. All the best.
J

[Doug Ordunio]

Interesting poem--sounds almost like a lyric (which it may be) I think it's all fine, except, remove the two "away"s. They aren't needed.

[GTVile]

That was good. It was vague enough in parts and explicit enough in others to make the reader want to keep reading. I think its may be a bit too elusive for people that won't put the intellectual effort into trying to understand it, but if you only want people who care to reap the rewards of emotional investment, then its perfect. I'm sure it was good to get it out as well.

[Marie Harrison]

Cool poem!

[Ellen Hammond]

Whether this is about drugs, self mutilation, or fear of letting others know who you really are inside, the need to escape reality and allow oneself to feel again flows through this poem. I can imagine this becoming a popular song someday. Well penned.

[Brad]

this is just screaming to get out...but on the otherhand, the author wants to keep it hidden...a relatable conundrum

[Lola Nation]

I'm not sure what genre of drug you're going for - tying off is generally heroin, doesn't really cut in (prick possibly) and cutting is for coke/etc... nice rhythm, believable? not sure.