"A'Rising Reeling"  Collaboration with Frieda

"A'Rising Reeling" Collaboration with Frieda

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
"

i am re-posting this oldie because i was asked to ... to keep dear friend Frieda in remembrance here at the Cafe' ..in the hope that she will one day come back to us .. peace and joy to all! <3

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A'Rising Reeling



Have you looked square into the eye of death's dragon
whilst the sky was falling down in ember's shadow
fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity

spelled Wyverns hording antiquity's gifts
even in sleep red eyes mesmerize
striking deaf and dumb all who so 
foolishly dare fly into the lair on shivery aileron 

skeletons in smoky closeted dust
prey upon the mind's placidity 
graying the essence of coma's stake
suspended in lethargic dormancy 

osteoporitic clickety clack
thighs calves and tendons rendered
under the leech bloat belly of Smaug
Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional


Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby
murky bodies of water sync in disconnect
discontent of an allusion's regimented menagerie
Requiem's Mass hysteria hijacked greener pastures



© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Einstein Noodle

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'A Rising Reeling'
Einstein Noodle,
I was intrigued and inspired by this poem at the same time.
This one touches the reality of confusion and discouragement
-when hope is gone- when evil and or or chaos then fills hopes place.
The metaphors of dragons and the surrounding powers of darkness
swirl throughout this writing.
"Fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity"
The thing that is so interesting and even lovely is to see
that it was a collaboration between two people which really played
well off each other and that is just plain cool. The whole peice was
stunning and I had to read it through several times. I also like the ending.
Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby. The theme continues all through
of what is desired and comforting looked for but not found.
Impressive for sure!
Blessings,
Kathy

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

oh i'm sure you can Kathy! try a classic form of one kind or another .. or use the "voice" of a man .. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

11 Months Ago

When you put it that way it sounds doable.
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

YES! doable my friend!!



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You wrote this with Frieda Pickle? The most amazing poetess who ever rode the internet poetry dragon?
There are so many amazingly sublime and brilliant lines in this flowing evocative poem that I do not doubt it. You are a wonderful collaboration. And I miss her too!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thanks John! she is a Sweet Pickle for sure :) so glad you visited and reviewed .. her presence is s.. read more
This is a pandora’s Box of goodies here, such lovely imagery of doom, maybe hope and dark themes. Who would have thought two heads wrote this as the blend makes the write seem written from one! Yes, on a second look such a delight to read, great lines, vivid imagery, what a pleasure!

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Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thanks Andrew ... so happy you enjoyed ... yes...lots of dark in this one my friend ;} perhaps hope .. read more
Frieda of all poeple had her own personal demons which she chanelled so well into her poetry.
Frightening, nightmare images penned with such clarity, and death of anything beautiful is found in a requiem mass...

Brilliant... the both of you.

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Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

try this one: https://hellopoetry.com/frieda-p/
you may have to create a page for yourself to.. read more
Stella Armour

5 Months Ago

i have a page there , i just dont post lol
Stella Armour

5 Months Ago

found Frieda's page , but everything is 5 years old and no sign of Noodle , who has probably gone th.. read more
It dont matter how many times I read this incredible collab me dear E.. I keep coming back to it, like a lost puppy... I am back here again now because I think it is most apt given my recent resurrection of an oldie.. I know you know which one I mean... maybe you will re-post so others may be able to cast their eyes on a joint worked masterpiece ... Stay good Gene and stay true, your mate, Me :)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

of course i know of which you speak ... this one has so much of that Frieda we all love and miss .. .. read more
Neville Pettitt

5 Months Ago

I do so hope you will re-post my friend & for those very same reasons... unfortunately, although I s.. read more
This is a journey of suspense, of escaping dragon's eyes, of challenging life's difficulties and coming out voctorious. A hidden message to fight on, never give us and leave the critics in the dust bin of history. What a collaboration. She shall be missed.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

how grateful you found this one and reviewed it Sami! Frieda is truly missed even after such a long .. read more
Sami Khalil

5 Months Ago

You are both welcome.
Great stuff, Crispy Noodle! I particularly liked these two lines:
'under the leech bloat belly of Smaug
Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional'
Hope you are enjoying this amazing summer, my friend.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

how happy i am you found this one Mr. Iron! and oh how we miss Frieda ..oh my! :(
we had gre.. read more
The Iron Horseman

11 Months Ago

Thanks, buddy. Glad you are having a good one, but don't wish Fall on us just yet, please! :D
.. read more
'A Rising Reeling'
Einstein Noodle,
I was intrigued and inspired by this poem at the same time.
This one touches the reality of confusion and discouragement
-when hope is gone- when evil and or or chaos then fills hopes place.
The metaphors of dragons and the surrounding powers of darkness
swirl throughout this writing.
"Fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity"
The thing that is so interesting and even lovely is to see
that it was a collaboration between two people which really played
well off each other and that is just plain cool. The whole peice was
stunning and I had to read it through several times. I also like the ending.
Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby. The theme continues all through
of what is desired and comforting looked for but not found.
Impressive for sure!
Blessings,
Kathy

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

oh i'm sure you can Kathy! try a classic form of one kind or another .. or use the "voice" of a man .. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

11 Months Ago

When you put it that way it sounds doable.
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

YES! doable my friend!!
Amazing words a true marriage of co-joint minds and pens perfect...... A great write Gene without question... and oh' if you should ever hear from the lovely Ms P...say hi and send her me luv.....Neville

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you so much Neville...i'm afraid Frieda is hard to reach these days .. we use to e-mail now an.. read more
Neville Pettitt

1 Year Ago

shame that but yes, I understand and back at you my very good friend..... N.
That was a very amazing work, and a very harmonic collabration..well done

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Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

thank you Stars! Frieda makes things easy! :)
E.
I just adore the fantasy themed mystery lying within this. Very exquisite! The pure elegance of each line swirling with each of your styles is pure magic. Well done guys.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

Hi Peeping! appreciate your visit to our dragon land .. thank you for your kind and encouraging word.. read more

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Added on September 6, 2014
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