The Deep

The Deep

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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this is a lipogram i wrote for a class (same class the cinquaine was written for) the lipogram, for those who are unfamiliar with, is a poem using one vowel only. i chose "E"

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"The Deep"
The endless Ether
left deep clefts                                        
heed me
keep knees free
                                     enter the descent
                                                                     Hell's decree bends the rent
See me!?
Steep we creep
Spent.
Endless Ether we flee
11/28/2018
E.

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
I struggled to have a theme ... would really like to know if you have a sense of one .. :}

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It’s a different kind of creative joy when we are able to produce worthwhile expression within the limitation of format and structure. For me that’s the supreme kind of satisfaction. I read the endless twists, turns and bends as we navigate, crawl, hurtle through the all pervading ether to our ordained ends. Appreciated very much, E 💕

Posted 8 Months Ago


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DIVYA

8 Months Ago

Oh bedtime then! :)
GoodMorning hugs! And do grab a bit of sleep :))))
Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

headed that way now ;)
DIVYA

8 Months Ago

.......😉☺️😊.......



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I was unfamiliar with lipogram... challenging. Your use of E was very well done...nicely descriptive piece Einstein

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

its certainly one of those challenging forms .. thanks for taking time LE! and i appreciate the enco.. read more
LE Berry

1 Week Ago

Very welcome Einstein...thanks for adding to my knowledge.
Great use of technique and language and a great challenge for aspiring writers, to break the rules you must know them first, Wish you were my English teacher,

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

i would have been a terrible teacher .. no doubt in my nog ... I have a BA in Music but could not re.. read more
Shazbatt969

3 Months Ago

Peace and joy, to you, E "was not intended to be a rock star, so went into construction instead" is .. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

:)))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Amazing I have yo try this. It looks like fun.
And you make it look so easy. Of course when someone is good at something it always looks easy. Wish me luck.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

Oh! not easy at all ... at least for me ... the one vowel thing is easy but trying to make it say so.. read more
Egads, Gene!
10-4, good buddy, dancin' with the Devil can sure get ya into the DEEP s..t, alright!

Mind-boggling form, My Friend, and much more challenging to accomplish than one might think. In fact, I quit teaching it, altogether, because it was so hard for me to do I didn't feel justified assigning it to students.
This is, actually, an amazingly rare Univocalic Lipogram poem, and a Pandngrammatic Lipogram is prose or poetry that uses every letter of the alphabet "except" one.
I dig the rhymes and presentation, too … quite unique and entertaining.

You never cease to amaze me.
Besides its difficulty, the most amazing thing about this piece is that you titled it and kept to the theme throughout, and it makes sense, even to ME … LOL!

Gene, I think you might be the most prolifically varied poet onsite, and never boring, I might add … LOL!
Thanks for the gin-you-wine treat! ⁓ Richard 🍃

110/100

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

damn Richard!!! my head is burting ..you are so kind with your remarks and you point out the hardest.. read more
Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Well, Poet,
Ya done exceptionally good on this assignment. ( A+ )
Now, go shampoo with.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

ahahahaha ... hmmmmmmmmm haven't shampooed in weeks :{{{{{{{{{{[ !
An exceptional poem. That takes you places. Deeper, dark and descending into the pit of hell. Great images that explode inside your mind's eye on reading and exploring the images it gives you too.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

you are very kind Dawn ... the lipogram was not easy for me ... using it to say something worthwhile.. read more
Dawn

6 Months Ago

You did a wonderful job in your lipogram Einstein. I do agree digging more causes danger. :)
Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

;) ........................
Wow! very impressed with the picture you've portrayed within this poetic format.. and thanks for teaching me a new form! i'll have to give it a go.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

oh my goodness lizard! i hope it doesn't curse you :) not easy for me at all ... for a free verse pe.. read more
lizardbrain

6 Months Ago

it might force me to give at least a modicum of thought and revision to my poems that they currently.. read more
I fear any sort of descent ~ especially into the unknown. Get the feeling of a fearful potholer ~ the fealr of being trapped! Your piece though short tells a lot! Cleverly put.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

hey kitty! thanks for checking this one out ... i feel pretty gratified all those things came across.. read more
kitty

6 Months Ago

The extraordinary is always a fascinating subject. We wonder too about the supernatural!
This is clever and witty and yet........................................................Enjoyed it but simply too difficult to emulate!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

thanks always for your time John ... sure appreciate it ... not an easy form for sure ... would not .. read more
This is fun i must try doing one of these when my brain is functioning properly.. (once or twice a month me thinks) death waits for no man nor bunny my friend :) and in my case he visits quite often:( brilliantly composed as usual. thanks for the thought food!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

its (death) a faithful and constant companion isn't it ;) ...at any age :( ... the form was definite.. read more
Firstly, since I came across your cinquain, I have got addicted and filled half a notebook. So I guess that this will be what the other half is for, but I doubt I will be anywhere near as sucesful as your amazing mind.This is just so good and original, that im beginning to doubt I am awake...i certainly wont be tonighy as I crumple page after page in a vain effort to emulate your excellence.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

flattery will get you everywhere my friend ;) ..but..seriously ..thank you so much for this generous.. read more
Lorry

7 Months Ago

You're welcome. Think i'll stick to a collection of my favourites, but might be a while as I will di.. read more

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