The Rose ... a collaboration with Lingering Soul

The Rose ... a collaboration with Lingering Soul

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

She woke delightfully from her dream
Unfurled her curves and gown without a seam

She knew times beyond her dawn
In lustrous color and wilder form

At bay side waters she sat alone
Whistling tunes of meadows many tones

Splashes of blue ...splashes of red
from shore to shore she lifts her head

Maybe a lonely night was through
A day has made a difference too

As romance stood shading her
Lovers leap and passions stir

A gleaming fragrant morning glow
Sheds petals of pure rain in wind and snow

Having pushed through tired rock and soil
Imbuing thoughts of linens' lemon coyle

05/28/2019
Lingering Soul and E.

 

"Top definition ... Coyle's are placed throughout the world to spread joy and happiness and to bring wit and pleasure ... AH, she was a lovely coyle, so charming!!"

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Einstein Noodle

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love the allegory here...just a rose, or not?
a song from a beautiful flower, heartwrenching...janis, such a beloved blues/rock singer, but in her own world...struggling with loneliness...so unsure of life and why she is in it...
this is really powerful my friend...
you and Lingering Soul sound as one here...you are both such strong individual voices, but combined...?

Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

B

7 Months Ago

Thanks J :)
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

and wow for your review, jacob! thanks so much! and you added a whole other dimension relating it to.. read more



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The opening couplet is sublime in the vision it portrays of a sleepy woman stretching from her bed. The rest has a sadness pinned to its heart yet there is hope in the coyle yet.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

i believe so John ... an enduring muti-symbol-ed beauty in any language ... thank you for your sensi.. read more
Honestly, one of the stronger collabs I have seen on here over the years. It is well balanced, with a lovely cadence to it. Not in much of a critique mood, but just wanted to say that I did enjoy this.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

Nusquaaaaaaaaaaaaaaam!! i am so happy to see you having a bit of a stroll around the Cafe' ..i thoug.. read more
Nusquam Esse

5 Months Ago

Nusquam Esse... it may imply that I am not about to leave an impression. ;)
...Awe-inspiring... Tempo and breathe is just otherworldly...

A gleaming fragrant morning glow
Sheds petals of pure rain in wind and snow
Having pushed through tired rock and soil
Imbuing thoughts of linens' lemon coyle

Not only did I see and feel this one... I think my chair is a bit misty... Is that salt in the air...? I swear I heard a faint whistle somewhere... My god this poem takes you places... Or it brings the places TO you... Either/or... Silly-good effort on both parts...

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

how wonderful this took you places ... the magic of poetry isn't it ... and that you feel it in this.. read more
Silente-Write

7 Months Ago

Aye, very much welcome... Beautiful song did not hurt either... It helped my bus of imagining
Roses shedding petals of pure rain... you give us a respite to rest upon
in meadows hue of flowers wild. When life holds dreams at bay and
melodies will calm our stay. A lovely collaboration from the dawn of time
and beyond. truly, Pat

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

ahahahaha yes ...restless or at rest as the case may be :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Patricia Wedel

3 Months Ago

dear E... each day is priceless and like precious stones to be embedded in moments that bring comfor.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

yes it is, Pat ... treasured to be sure .. you have set my eyes to open for this particular new day .. read more
Such a lyrical collaboration! The couplets are seamless...impossible to tell who wrote what. You tell a tale here of loneliness and heartbreak, but also of hope for a better day. I have always liked the song by Bette Midler. A wonderful job, you two. Lydi**

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thanks Lydia! i feel pretty good you read this as seamless ... and that there is hope in it too ... .. read more
Love flies on the wings of the imaginations and touches the divine essence of life. The bond of love and beauty hold firm in our minds and hearts. Free from all constraints, it releases goodness and lovely cheers to all who receive and drink from its endless spring. I can linger in your collaboration and drink from the well of creativity. Thank you both.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

wow Sami!! i am going to ride that positivity all day today :))))))))) thank you ever so much for ta.. read more
Sami Khalil

7 Months Ago

All rich blessings. You are welcome. Both too...
I love reading this poem becuz of how well it flows, with great rhythm & rhyme. I forgot the title as I read & I missed any "rose" observations . . . then going back to check it out, I saw how this aspect of your extended metaphor tied in. All in all, your message feels like a kaleidoscope of observations, as if one is just awakening, or just opening up to some discovery/realization, just feeling the sensations more than thinking about what's on the horizon, the way startling imagery explodes in the mind's eye, blotting out any analytical synapses about what it is. You lead us to dwell in the sensory experience & suspend the need to interpret (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

smiling big time Margie ... I feel very happy to have worked with Lingering to offer this uncomplica.. read more
B

7 Months Ago

Thank you Barley Girl
I liked the romantic images and the sense of the struggle that had gone before - 'pushing through tired rock and soil'. The dawn, the waters, the lonely night, the petals, the linen... all created a wonderful mix of sensations that spoke to me of hope, passion and delight.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thank you for your sensitive reading of this one Jibey .. very much appreciate your time spent here .. read more
B

7 Months Ago

Thank you Jibey
A magical collaboration! The entire piece flows splendidly, especially with the music.

Posted 7 Months Ago


B

7 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind review
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

hi R.E. Ray! thanks for taking time to read and review ... glad you appreciate the music as well .. .. read more
"love it is a flower"
oh yes and of course it has to be a red rose.
A lovely song to use to write a collaborate poem to... well done both of you :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


B

7 Months Ago

Thank you Stella
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

actually the poem came first ;) but i agree that it is fitting indeed .. one of my personal favorite.. read more

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