The Rose ... a collaboration with Lingering Soul

She woke delightfully from her dream

Unfurled her curves and gown without a seam

She knew times beyond her dawn

In lustrous color and wilder form

At bay side waters she sat alone

Whistling tunes of meadows many tones

Splashes of blue ...splashes of red

from shore to shore she lifts her head

Maybe a lonely night was through

A day has made a difference too

As romance stood shading her

Lovers leap and passions stir

A gleaming fragrant morning glow

Sheds petals of pure rain in wind and snow

Having pushed through tired rock and soil

Imbuing thoughts of linens' lemon coyle

05/28/2019

Lingering Soul and E.

 

"Top definition ... Coyle's are placed throughout the world to spread joy and happiness and to bring wit and pleasure ... AH, she was a lovely coyle, so charming!!"

Author's Note

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the allegory here...just a rose, or not?
a song from a beautiful flower, heartwrenching...janis, such a beloved blues/rock singer, but in her own world...struggling with loneliness...so unsure of life and why she is in it...
this is really powerful my friend...
you and Lingering Soul sound as one here...you are both such strong individual voices, but combined...?

Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[B]

Thanks J :)

[Einstein Noodle]

and wow for your review, jacob! thanks so much! and you added a whole other dimension relating it to janis ... honestly had not had her in mind when writing .. but should have ... one of my all time favorites for her music and the statement of her living ... so glad you decided to stop to read this my friend ... working with Lingering was a delight ... made easy by her Soul ;)))))))))
E.

[R.E. Ray]

A magical collaboration! The entire piece flows splendidly, especially with the music.

[B]

Thank you for your kind review

[Einstein Noodle]

hi R.E. Ray! thanks for taking time to read and review ... glad you appreciate the music as well .. Lingering is a bit of magic inspiration that you see in this :) ... love and joy sir!
E.

[Stella Armour]

"love it is a flower"
oh yes and of course it has to be a red rose.
A lovely song to use to write a collaborate poem to... well done both of you :)

[B]

Thank you Stella

[Einstein Noodle]

actually the poem came first ;) but i agree that it is fitting indeed .. one of my personal favorites of Bette...dedicated to another favorite Janis :( poor Janis .. one of too many lost too soon ... thanks so much for reviewing Stella .. so happy you chose to read this one! love, peace and flowers always :)
E.

[lightsong]

this is SPECIAL hauntingly beautiful! makes me filled with wistfulness and warm yearnings... and why I feel that this lonely Rose is a one "who" is so much giving with not much to receive, this makes my heart feels so sad... a lonely Rose, a lonely woman, a lonely Lover, a lonely Love... the song, oh of course I love it and just PERFECT here! Thank You both for such a tender affectionate gem!

[Einstein Noodle]

:) i don't know what to say Light ..thank you ... thank you so much for saying so .. it was a delight to work with Lingering .. the process was open and fluid i must say .. love and peace always!
E.

[B]

Thank you Light
No one who emits love is ever alone
or sad ;)

[Mrudula Rani]

Rose symbolizes balance. Its beauty specifies promise and hope, your poem draws flawless picture of all those qualities. Exquisite couplets with delightful rhyming . A wonderful collaboration of extraordinary poets. Absolutely beautiful!

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! thank you so much Mrudula! its very gratifying when we move each other in such a way isn't it?! thanks so much for your time and encouraging words .. peace and love!
E.

[B]

Thanks Mrudula

[Mrudula Rani]

you are most welcome.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Sadness pain love happiness
all in one so powerful passionate
And very deep beautiful piece
from the both of you E.


At bay side waters she sat alone
Whistling tunes of meadows many tones

Splashes of blue ...splashes of red
from shore to shore she lifts her head

[Einstein Noodle]

:)))) love that you like this one .. i am particularly happy with it me self ... such a pleasure to work with Lingering Soul ...

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

It's always nice to read new
work of yours and even collaborations

Take care my friend
enjoy your week I'm
going to do morning
stretches and have coffee ☕
And breakfast it's 9:15am
here in Georgia 👍😊

[Einstein Noodle]

I'm in AR ... 1 hour earlier ;) Georgia is a beautiful sate i think ... my oldest son was married in Georgia :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Only bad thing about Georgia
is the bad air and the really high
Pollen count and kicks me in the
butt and I am not crazy about the
heat and it constantly raining.

But other than that
it's gorgeous I love
the dog wood trees
And cherry blossom
trees here.

But pollen is low in
Iowa and not bad unhealthy
smog air there either and
that's the city for you but
I'm a country girl and that's
why because I love my health
And the quiet lol...

my friend Georgia
is beautiful to visit
only but I don't want
to live here no more lol...
👍😊

[Einstein Noodle]

yeah .. pollen fills the air here too .. twice a year ... i remember the rain and humidity of Georgia ... but not the smog .. guess we were not near a larger city ... lots of trees ;) i won't ever go back to that upper midwest winters ... ugh!! i'll suffer the pollen ... but it mostly only makes my eyes itch and water and eye drops take care of that .. fortunately my breathing is not affected .. hang in there Benita :)

[B]

Thanks Benita

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome 😁😊

[Paul Bell]

Like when the reader gets to use their imagination.
You take us on a journey which sometimes gets lost when two people write together. But this flows effortlessly through and through.
You both have a rare gift for writing together.
Plus, I now know what Coyle's are now.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! a great word isn't it?! thanks, Paul, for taking time to read, experience and review ... always an important part of the Cafe' says i ..and always appreciated ... peace brother!
E.

[Paul Bell]

You too, enjoy the day. Who's winning the cup tonight.

[Einstein Noodle]

aaaaaaaa what cup? ;} ... never been much on sports ... i do start to watch football when the final 6 or 8 teams start to come down to the wire .. to play in the Superbowl ... my luck is so poor it seems i put the whammy on teams i decide to cheer for ;)

[Paul Bell]

Liverpool and Spurs tonight. Thinking Liverpool.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhhhhhhhhh .. looks like it was Liverpool ... are you happy?

[Paul Bell]

Yeah think they deserved it.

[B]

Thanks Paul

[Richard🖌]

Wow, you two, "Lingering Soul and E"!
A lovelier cowrite I've seldom seen; nor, felt the sweetness of upon my mind's fragrant tongue.
Sensual? Yes, but wondrously imaginative in a warm and tender way.
To me, one of the hallmarks of a well-struck collaboration between two passionate artists, is the seamlessness that secrets which words, lines, and verses are whose, and this one surely shines with lovely, indiscernible togetherness and harmony.
Hint for future writes: During my early years, I discovered the flow in Rhyming Couplets works best with an even syllable count … even so, you've joined together to create a lovely virtual masterpiece of warmth and affection in imagery and metaphor, any poet would be proud to set their name upon … love the use of the Irish "coyle", too.
And, of course, the picture choice is muaaahhh!

Thank you for sharing some real-feeling togetherness … we need more of it! ⁓ Richard : )

( As an aside, I'm not gay, but check this out … it's unique and beautiful … your music choice brought it to mind and I thought you might enjoy it, too: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CaROl1j-xBY )

[Einstein Noodle]

Richard .. thank you so much for your helpful tips and very encouraging review .. i appreciate syllable counting ... i think we unconsciously agreed to allow ourselves that bit of freedom ;) the Soul was fantastic to work with .. thanks again for your sensitive and thorough review sir! God bless!
E.

[B]

Thank you Richard

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully harmonized, Lady-Poet ⁓ I thank You, as-well.🍃

[Ken Simm.]

Such a lovely lilting feeling to this. Exudes roamance and never could I think that I had recognised who did what. This then has all the hallmarks of a lovely collaboration.

[B]

Thank you Ken

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! thank you Ken ... love your visits ... i expect you will be sharing something soon??? ;)
E.

[Ken Simm.]

There is another seventies story allready up Gene. If you would care to... And you are more than welcome.

[Einstein Noodle]

going there now Ken! ... your 70s are quite entertaining to say the least ;)

[emmajoy]

Some collaborations work so well it would be undiplomatic to chose a preferred phrase or stanza.. and chance hurting one of the writers! Here, there's no chance of that: you've either been together since time began or.. you understand the other's thinking and craft with amazing understanding. Tis a beautiful collaboration, smooth as silk and gently rising passion.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness Em! thrilled that you found it so! i think the Lingering Soul and i do share a connection .. but this is our first collab and for my part working together, back and forth with freedom each to change rearrange or eliminate .. was very natural between us ... sans egos ;) thanks so much for reading and reviewing .. your review is very encouraging!
E.

[B]

Its simply just poetry, we are good friends.
We simply shared our thoughts on a work of art

Thanks Emma