We Own the Night

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“Hey!” Chad, my best bud called. “The guys just saw Kristen by the lake. Word is she broke up with Jake last week. Dude! This is your biggest chance yet.”

I sat on the hill, leaning on my arms and gazing down at the lake. I looked up at the sunset. “No. Think I’ll just stay here.” I reply.

Chad acts like he’s trying to clean something from his ear.

“Did I just here my bud giving up on a golden opportunity here?”

I smiled. “Naw,” I said. “I just want to stay up here for awhile.”

Chad shrugs. “Hey, whatever you say, but that doesn’t mean I have to miss this one in a lifetime chance.” He yelled back as he raced down the hill.

 

 I sighed, lying back down in the grass. My hands serving as a pillow, as I gazed up at the dieing sky. It wouldn’t be long now until dark.

Every year the town hosts a fireworks display at Hopper’s Pond, just outside the fairground, to celebrate the end of summer.

But the thought of fireworks or Kristen-the girl I’ve had a crush on since the sixth grade-were the least thing upon my mind.

 

 Instead I was reliving my dream from last night for the umpteenth time today, something I never wanted to forget.

It was something I wanted so badly, but had to face the reality of it never coming true.

I remember every detail, every touch, every smell, but it was just beyond my reach, which made me think of it even harder.

 

 She was the purest beauty, but not the coming kind. She had a way about her that made you feel alive. The way her hair shimmered gold in the light, and her deep green eyes made your heart melt. Even her voice was sweeter than honey, it made you want to listen to it forever.

 And just to hear her laughter was like to hear wind chimes in a lazy breeze.

 She was the kind of person who didn’t care who you were, as long as you didn’t care who she was.

 I could just…be myself with her.

 

My dreamed started just like any other.

 I didn’t know where the hell I was.

That was, until I saw the sky light up followed by thunderous booms, then I knew I was dreaming of being at Hopper’s Pond on a day like this.

But the only thing that told me I was dreaming was her.

 

 Her hair highlighted different colors each time the fireworks went off, as she laid back watching the war in the sky.

And to me she couldn’t be more beautiful, with her watchful gaze…well until she looked at me.

 

 She smiled tenderly at me and waved me over.

“I haven’t seen you before, are you new here?” She asked.

I sat down next to her. “No, I’ve been here my whole life. What about you?” I asked. “I haven’t seen you ether.”

She laughed. “I guess it’s not that small of a town like I thought then.” She held a hand out. “I’m Joyce, by the way.”

I took her hand gently in mine. “David.” I replied.

And that’s how our night began.

 

 I don’t know how long our night together was, but I didn’t care. I rather die than to wake up now.

 We watched the fireworks together, she told me about how she loved the green squiggly ones. I laughed when she told me they looked like snakes slithering across the sky and she shoved me when I said they looked like somebody had just sneezed.

Joyce took off running when I made a playful lunge at her in return, both of us laughing our heads off like little kids.

 

 We took off towards the field that was covered knee high with grass, the fireworks providing light every so often.

 I watched her dance through the field from the limited glances of the fireworks. She gave a playful shout when I caught up with her, tackling her, carefully in my arms, to the ground.

 

 I held her close, the only thing we said was our harsh breathing and her quiet giggling.

 She slid her arm slowly out of my grasp and laid it on my cheek. Her soft green eyes held unto mine. I leaned in closer so that our foreheads were touching.

This is how I wanted it to be.

 Here with her in my arms, the crickets chirping softly around us, and the stars our only witness.

Here the world stood still

 Here we owned the night.

 

 She laughed once, then moved away, getting up from the ground. I frowned, but she just smiled.

“Come on!” She urged, taking off towards the fairground.

 

 I slid between people as best as I could, apologizing as I went. Lights blinked from the carnival stalls, the air was mixed with the sweet smell of cotton candy and popcorn.

“Joyce!” I scanned each face, hoping to recognize her in the crowd.

I started running, almost tripping over a four year old in the process.

“Sorry, sorry.” I muttered to the crying child.

Where was she?

 

 I heard the echo of screaming coming from the Ferris Wheel, I turn my head automatically and recognize a head of familiar blond hair.

I let out a sigh.

Suddenly my heart felt lighter, as I walked toward her.

Joyce didn’t turn her head when I held her hand, instead she seemed mesmerized by it’s vastness.

“Come on.” I said tugging her to the entrance line.

 

 “Oh God, why did I even do this?” She moaned into her hands as the Ferris Wheel began it’s climb slowly.

“What? You’re afraid of heights?” I asked.

Joyce peeked through her fingers, her lips curled into a nervous smile.

“No, I love it up here.” She sighed, leaning back in the seat, turning her head toward me.

“I was thinking, why did I ride this with you sitting inches from me.” Her eyes sparkled.

I leaned closer to her. “Maybe I can change your mind about that.”

Her lips met mine halfway, fire and pleasure shot through my veins.

How badly I wanted to do that.

 

 I pull back, surprised, when I taste her salty tears.

“What's wrong.” I whispered, wiping her tears away with my thumb. She caught my hand and held it to her face.

“David, I don’t want you to go.” She cried, laying her head upon my shoulder.

In my mind I asked. Go where? I’m never leaving.

That was until realized where we were.

In a dream.

A dream I would soon wake up from.

“Same here.” I replied, hugging her tightly. “I’d give anything to just stay here forever.”

But we both could feel it.

 

 That pull, something trying to separate us, trying to drag us out of this world. We had no choice but to follow it.

As the world started to fade away, we stared at each other until it was like trying to see something on a TV with bad reception.

I could feel her hand begin to fade from mine.

“David,” I heard her say, but her voice grows weaker.

“D’vd…dn't....go.”

 

　

BOOM!

 

The first fireworks went off in the sky, bringing me back to the present.

 The same ache in my chest throbbed, while I stared at the sky, picking out the green squiggly ones.

 Behind me voices started coming up the hill. I watched as three figures walked toward me.

 I knew Chad’s hulking form and Kristen’s dainty one walking beside him, but the third figure I couldn’t tell by the way it fell in step behind the other two.

 “Hey David.” Kristen greeted me and I waved a hand. “Have you met my friend-”

 

“Joyce.” I said in awe. Her green eyes looked back at me with curiosity and a hint of something else…remembrance?

 

Kristen frowned. “Have you two met?” She asked.

 

Joyce smiled, something so warm it seem to melt my body.

“We’ve met before.” She said as I took her hand in mine.

Author's Note

I heard Lady A's song We own the night and this was the first thing that popped into mind and i didn't want it to leave, so i wrote it.

tell me if there are any mistakes please!
And i apologize for the story being so long!


Thanks for your reviews they mean a lot to me

Reviews

[WaitingOnTheStars]

I loved this story, I got so excited when I saw that you incorporated part of the song into your story! It was lovely. What I really loved about this story was that I could picture it all in my head and play it like movie as I read, which is exactly what I can do when I read a book. I think that just goes to say how strong of a short story this was. I noticed you apologized for the length but I honestly think that if you would have made this shorter it would've stunk because it would've felt rushed. Honestly you could probably make this longer. I can honestly say this is my favorite piece of literature I've read on this website so far.

[SwagMaster]

Aw, they dreamed together! So sweet! You are a great writer!

[Savannah Marie 9]

very sweet

[Savannah Marie 9]

i like it, very sweet

[Tai Ryens]

Sweet poem. The connection between the dream and reality was nicely done. One thing, this can use a bit of proof reading. Especially around the beginning. For example, the first 'here' in the first paragraph is supposed to actually be a 'hear'. Another is the 'one', it should be 'once'. Anyways, those are just minor mistakes, nothing more, keep up the great work.

[paparapapa]

This is so sweet and so cute! And I love the twist at the end. Very brilliant plot and you have a way with your words. You're an awesome writer. Great job! :)

[Team_Jaward_Gale]

its sweet long but thats fine you should add more and maybe make a book

[Jamie Raintree]

This was sweet. I believed in the connection of the characters in the dream so the part about him waking up was so sad! I thought it was very cool that she recognized him too at the end. I really enjoyed it.

[Thea]

Aw! Such a cute and beautiful story! I enjoyed reading it!
Brilliant idea! A truly lovely story!
:)))

[~ Stefanie ~]

This was a very creative story :) I'm glad I took some time to sit down and read it. The story captivated my attention from the beginning :) There were not any mistakes that I could see! Well done!

[A. L. Allen]

Awww, this is so cute! I love it! I think it's so cool that they met each other in a dream. It kind of reminds me of Disney's Sleeping Beauty and how she sings "I know you, I've walked with you once upon a dream". I know, I'm a geek. :p
Amazing job, as usual!