Predator Echoes~

my killer walks

with a side gait

that announces his wound

I have never seen his eyes

but I know

they are cloud blue

from drinking my smoky jazz life

his mind is like a boombox

killer

sinner

fresh skin

peel each tattoo with the sharpest wit

I know what he wants

a variation

on the victim

 

today is a fine day

a sunny day

his eyes dream me through layers

of cobalt passion

and evergreen pain

crucify my wings

nail patterns

stretched against the horizon

pressed

into my cherry tree spine

 

my killer

watches

patience

he would pin me

inside the collection

that bleeds from his mind all over the space

he occupies

his halo filled with struggling girls

dying girls

but this time

he wants something different

a predator like himself

bleeding

her predatory victims

into his temples

 

killer

killer

his mind is a boombox

 

I wonder

what sounds

enter him

from within my own skull

 

 

 

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Author's Note

~some hominids seriously broadcast~

Reviews

[LilyT]

Don't play too hard with fate, Selene. This one is too close to your private hell. It's difficult to read because you've pressed your unique ink into it deeper than you should. Don't encourage the monsters. It won't ever end pretty.


he wants something different

a predator like himself

bleeding




Walk away.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Makes me think of Jim Morrisons poetry somewhat /
The mind of a killer has to be one of utter horror to see .

"killer

killer

his mind is a boombox



I wonder

what sounds

enter him

from within my own skull"

Sorry to do that - that just jumps at the reader as if both minds have just a minute bit in common ... me, i may be wrong ..
Love the line or words , "his mind is a boombox"

Chloe

[Sourav]

Very intense and great depiction. And L=liked the way the poem ends. Enjoyable read.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

"... a variation on the victim ..." Victimized to victimize, and the cycle never ends. It's an ugly echo that resounds across the ages. Would that all such tragedies would reach their end.

Linda Marie

[quinfinn]

wow! this is powerful and has a huge presence. i love the metaphorical tilt and the very profound imagery. absolutely brilliant write!

[Legacy]

Selene,

I Must completely agree with several of your fans; Celeste for one... It's funny, I did the exact thing, for the exact reason.

If indeed this poem was true to life, then indeed LilyT has it nailed.

However, throwing them in the front line and allowing others to see through the mask- should - by rights - force them to hide in shame or fear. Whatever the situation is use caution and care for there is only one of you.

I hope this has worked out for you and no matter what has said, please never stop writing dark if this is where your heart is, even for that moment, for we know our hearts are the souls of our pen...

Have a great day,

Legacy

[Kerry O'Connor]

Such an intimate understanding of the stalker's mind from the consciousness of his prey. But she plays a dangerous game... scary stuff, written with dark and twisted beauty.

[Rose Downing]

I love the dark bent this poem has. Your use of language keeps the flow all the way trough the poem. I especially like "peel each tattoo with the sharpest wit." nice job!

[Celeste21]

Read this one twice- then cheated and reviewed the reviews as well to see if there is something that I was missing. From what it looks like- the killer you talk about may be in the form of a stalker and this of course is based off of truth.. I think. Maybe I'm wayyyyy off. Or maybe this is meant to be read figuratively and the killer is only trying to kill your sense of self. (More realistic lol)

I like how you said the predator wanted a predator like himself. You took his power right out of his hands. The hunter being haunted. Already in the poem you appear to have him all figured out. The last lines are eerie. As if you are conquering him with your mind and wondering how deeply you have f-d his mind up.. This is intriguing. I want more of this write..

[Sam]

Chilling. Amazing. Horrifying. Wonderful.