Promise To Myself

Written after an interesting conversation with a dear friend at about 11 PM last night.

We all have our places

And we all have our lies

We all break promises to ourselves

Records of unsuccessful tries

Loveland is for danger

Like the sky is for the stars

And the afterlife's for the screaming

Of a thousand broken hearts

 

A shatter leaves an echo

As empty promises fall down

It breaks like glass, the fragile heart

Brings tears with the sound

No more, no more, no more, say I

A promise I stray to turn from

But I try to walk the path I set

Until days are done...

 

Don't undermine my promise

You don't even have to try

I know you'd never hurt me

But I still don't want to cry

I'm so used to broken promises,

To drowning in the lies

Of those who came before you

Who brought tears to my eyes...

 

The human heart's an organ

But not one you can play

If you play with someone's heart

They are sure to turn away

Love is full of danger,

Be mindful of those wishing stars

Keep your thoughts and wishes locked inside

To avoid breaking my heart.

Reviews

[Aimee]

Freaking amazing poem.
And that's just an understatement.

The words just...flow, as "Senseless Whatever" said.

"Loveland is for danger
Like the sky is for the stars
And the afterlife's for the screaming
Of a thousand broken hearts"

^_^ My favorite part. It all fits so perfectly together.

In retrospect, I love this poem. It's incredible. [:

[KIMBERLY]

Very nice:)I really like it:)

[Amy]

beautiful, amazing, wonderful what else can i say i love this poem

[Taylor H.]

unbelievably good! loved it

[MattWheatus]

This is ridiculously good! Such true themes, and beautiful expressions. "I'm so used to broken promises, To drowning in the lies"; brilliant.

[Rachel Elizabeth]

This is such a sweet piece. My favorite part has to be:
"The human heart's an organ
But not one you can play
If you play with someone's heart
They are sure to turn away"
Not many people express that as well as you did.
I love the message behind it. Your friendship must be incredible♥. I can relate, so it makes it just as more compelling. This is a great piece of work and it's definitely going to be added to my library as a favorite.
Keep up the great work, hun.
Hearts from Bubbles!

[The Wave]

amazing

really loved how everything flowed.
overall, its written well, and carried great emotion. i didnt really pick up on any faults so...
good job

[nostal]

The words in this are powerful. Great flow.

[Samantha]

holy cow... my jaw litterally fell. I am not joking, this is by far the best poem i have ever read in my life. If i wasnt broke i would give you money. Thank you so much for sharing this. Holy cow, amazing, beautiful work. The line "and the afterlife's for screaming of a thousand broken hearts" just struck me. I can relate to this poem, so it was very emotional and strong. Each word was a peice of art. Amazing job.

[Senseless whatever]

Outstanding, One of your best works, hands down. This poem flows so freely, hiding emotion while bleeding it at the same time. I am speechless.