Hey Y'all, That Girl Looks Good

Hey there, girl.

Is it ok if I follow?

Just wanna talk a little

Not a hard pill to swallow.

How can such a cold aura

Give this man a fever?

You from ‘round here?

Huh? No? Me either.

Let us go quest a bit

While the sky is still blue.

We’ll find something wild,

Something strange to get into.

And when the night falls

I got good hands so I’ll catch it.

I’ll present to you the stars

They’ll let you shine above the reckless.

Now I see you got it all

You even cook a little too.

Go on and do your worst

Because I have a sweet tooth.

Whip it up, girl

That delectable chocolate cake.

If it’s half as sweet as you

Then a piece I’ll have to take.

Reviews

[afra]

it sounds like a rap ...cool

[Alrick]

haha, this poem just makes me smile reading it! :) it's such a great and relevant topic to everyone, yet with a comical twist to the serious air surrounding it! Just reading this poem makes me want to meet this girl!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Funny part is she got flaky about two months after I wrote this hahaha

[Alrick]

hahaha niceee

[Rhea752]

nice. it was very good. i like the part when you said you'd catch the night sky and present her the stars. it was sweet. keep writing.

[Marissa]

awesome!

[w]

Shallow piece, but not bad. the random rhymes annoy me, but maybe they weren't intentional.

[Laura Maidah]

I JUST EFFED IT. IT's BANANAS. Very good.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Well I know I like it. Haha! This is Awesome dude. Nice write!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Hopefully that means you like it? lol

[Laura Maidah]

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG. Jordan.