so it seems

so it seems

A Poem by marie

You never see this apathy
You never hear my cries and screams
This is plain to me
You are blind it seems

© 2013 marie


Author's Note

marie
sorry, i know its short, please give me some pointers on how to improve it

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nice little piece.....

Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

thank you:)
"you never hear my cries or screams" would be better...


but otherwise, a fine little piece.

jacob

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saya Marie Vandiesmonte

11 Years Ago

I agree other than that misspelling it was very well done from a poem that short
marie

11 Years Ago

yeah.. i need to fix that, thanks for pointing it out:)

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