Beside You ...

Beside You ...

A Poem by Susan 🌺
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Sonnet

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A distant heart-song gently shimmies near,
whilst shadows dance along a restless hush,
held captivated by your touch sincere ...
'til softly radiates a rosy blush.

Beside you, journeyed countless midnight dreams,
soared spangled heavens ~ swam vast oceans deep;
for, poets 'oft imagine … so, it seems,
cascading fantasies, as lovers sleep.

Come take my hand along a stargazed trail,
where all we yearn is flying wild 'n free.
'Pon bated breath emotions dare exhale
familiar ~ yet, it seems a memory.

A constant comfort, soothing warmth through time
… with every tender notion weaved in rhyme.

© 2020 Susan 🌺


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Thank you for your weave'd rhyme here. It is comforting. Something nice as i go about my work day. Well done Susan. This feels like a beautiful, soft, and inviting dream state.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


A beautifully soft and feather-like sonnet that whispers the deepest feelings of love. This was gorgeous, really nice poetry

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Susan 🌺

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for this sweet review!! Much appreciated 😊
Hello Susan,
I am new here, my name is Roth.
Someone said my poem 'The POET' is in classic style but someone else said it is not really classic and to read your sonnet poems if I want to know what the meaning of classic is so I'm here.
I am not sure what makes your sonnet classic but I know it is amazing poetry written in a way that is beautiful to read that is smooth and musical with exact rhyming and tells a dream like story of romantic thoughts and feelings that are almost real in the effect it gives me.
The picture and title help set a wonderful mood too and your words are like magic -- may I boldly ask if you will tell what makes this poem classic and how is this kind of sonnet done?
Your poem has made me want to write one and glad I was sent to read your sonnet.
To you a friendly smile and sincere thanks for sharing,
Roth

Posted 2 Months Ago


Susan 🌺

2 Months Ago

Good morning Roth and Welcome! I will try and answer your question first. I did review your poem and.. read more
Roth Jordain

2 Months Ago

Susan I thank you greatly for reading and reviewing my poem, I will read your words soon and make a .. read more
An enjoyable, feel-good sonnet. A gentle, easy flow, and poetically described. Nice one!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Susan 🌺

5 Months Ago

Hi Robert! Thank you for another review!!
Dear Susan, I loved how you made the words dance to perfect understanding.
"Beside you, journeyed countless midnight dreams,
soared spangled heavens ~ swam vast oceans deep;
for, poets 'oft imagine … so, it seems,
cascading fantasies, as lovers sleep."
I loved the above lines above. In dreams, I write the words first before paper. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


Susan 🌺

7 Months Ago

Thank YOU for reading!!! And for this awesome review!!! 💐💐
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

I enjoyed your work and you are welcome dear Susan.
So peaceful! Truly having the one you love beside you is an amazing feeling, and it's having someone close to you in your most vulnerable state (unconsciousness) which is magical.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Susan 🌺

7 Months Ago

Thank you Aura! Such a sweet review. I do appreciate you taking the time to read! 🌸
Aura

7 Months Ago

The pleasure is all mine. I enjoyed reading it :)
An exquisite sonnet Susan. Perfectly penned. Pleased to have stopped by this evening.

Chris

Posted 7 Months Ago


Susan 🌺

7 Months Ago

I absolutely love the form!! Thank you for stopping by and leaving me yet another, sweet review!💐
Chris Shaw

7 Months Ago

Sonnets are hard work. You make this one seem effortless.:)
Susan 🌺

7 Months Ago

Seem…. It’s hard work for me, but worth the time and effort.😊
A distant heart-song gently shimmies near,
whilst shadows dance along a restless hush,
held captivated by your touch sincere ...
'til softly radiates a rosy blush.
Love that stanza!
Your poem is beautiful!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Susan 🌺

8 Months Ago

Hi Karen! Thank you for taking the time to read and review! I’m glad you enjoyed this poem! 🍀
KAREN

8 Months Ago

My pleasure!
Mirror Image of You

In close proximity a heart is torn anew
Held tightly in a wrecked body of raptured chronic pain
Never seen, much less touched, I am unknown in plain view . . .
Proclaim you are kind, you never knew of this bane

Midnight passes you by in your pleasant dreams
Always awake with slumber only a dream for one in constant pain
Insomnia brings tears for alone I see my failures

If ever I saw an olive branch
My mind is so twisted and heart beyond repair
Apparent, per my solitude, the branch would continue to survive in the light . . .
While my darkness knows no path to sovereign peace

I see your out stretched hand
Virtual inquiry is the extent to it's extension
You truly will be of the masses and slam the door on my pathetic existence. . .
Should you even truly take a minute to know a small fraction of my devastation.

Fear is my locket of confinement bout my neck
Continuous tsunami of loath are the tides I ride
Tenderness is an abstract laugh I use at attempt to fake comfort . . .
No one welcomes a storm much less willing to live in an eternal one.


Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🌺

1 Year Ago

Did you intend to post this as a review?
Jo Billygoat

1 Year Ago

yes; as well as to be a converse view of your script
that is pure poetry magic. first class!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🌺

1 Year Ago

:) Thank you kindly for this review:)

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