Beside You ...

Sonnet

A distant heart-song gently shimmies near,

whilst shadows dance along a restless hush,

held captivated by your touch sincere ...

'til softly radiates a rosy blush.

Beside you, journeyed countless midnight dreams,

soared spangled heavens ~ swam vast oceans deep;

for, poets 'oft imagine … so, it seems,

cascading fantasies, as lovers sleep.

Come take my hand along a stargazed trail,

where all we yearn is flying wild 'n free.

'Pon bated breath emotions dare exhale

familiar ~ yet, it seems a memory.

A constant comfort, soothing warmth through time

… with every tender notion weaved in rhyme.

Reviews

[Patricia]

I enjoyed this piece. A pleasing visual portrait. Not a true sonnet in dimension but the feel is very real. Passionately penned with ease and you are talented. Brava!

[Susan 🦋]

I am aware I fudged this sonnet a bit... but thank you for yet another great review! :-)

[Patricia]

No no no sweetie it’s most definitely a sonnet, they have changed since Shakespeare so by his definition his sonnets are old school... this is a beautiful modern day sonnet. Sorry if I offended you I didn’t mean to. This is a sonnet and you have a wonderful talent for this so keep up the great work, truly!

[Susan 🦋]

Not offended at all..You are correct! I know, I have written several sonnets. This one just flowed a little different...I'm sure Shakespeare wont mind ;-)

[Patricia]

Oh he would be impressed

[CLR9]

I don't get it. Really. Why this style? It's making my gay hair fall out faster.

[Susan 🦋]

Nothing like having a tough day and opeing up WC to see this "review". Why even offer a comment? Remember the old saying. " If you can't say something nice, dont say anything at all". This is a Sonnet... I LIKE THEM... If it's not to your standards...move on.

[Susan 🦋]

I've had it with your ridiculous reviews, silly comments and child-like behaviour.Grow your gay a*s up!

[barleygirl]

I have been known to look down upon the lofty sonnet becuz many poets write them as if all the restrictions seem to be hampering their imagination. This is one of those rare sonnets that doesn't draw any attention to being a sonnet becuz you've done such a standout job of using interesting complex language, rhyming, storytelling & drama. Well done! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Susan 🦋]

Hi Margie! Thank you for reading and for the wonderful review!!!

[emmajoy]

' .. poets 'oft imagine … so, it seems, ~ cascading fantasies, as lovers sleep '

A beautiful picture and an equally beautiful outpouring of words.. calm, loving, yet passionate. From start to finish you've played the two parts with such skill, yet as waiting, waiting perhaps.. to explode into a billion stars.. fireworks.. magic!!! 'Beside you, journeyed countless midnight dreams,.. '

[Susan 🦋]

You leave the best reviews!! Thank you :-)

[emmajoy]

You're very welcome, no point in scanning then rushing off with just a 'Nice one!' left behind. Like to leave something friendly, appreciative. x

[Andrew Nelson Stewart]

Very well penned, so fluent and eloquent in delight almost resemblance of the constant waves bringing tranquility and serenity throughout the read. I felt a Shakespearean style and how love is very enigmatic and takes a leap of faith of complete surrender. Alan watts said once " You see, for all life is an act of faith and act of gamble." I loved the line "cascading fantasies, as lovers sleep." In this line I get How dreams and desires fall in stages down a steep rocky slope lapping over each other. Keep writing sincerely your friend in poetry and life :)

[Susan 🦋]

Aw Thank you for such a lovely review!!! I do appreciated it :-)

[duff]

A skillful pen with a dash of tranquility. It's a wonderful piece. Well done poet.

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you kindly! :-)

[Richard🖌]

Why, Lady Susan 🌼

This is more than merely an English Sonnet … it's a testament to your poetical mastery.
This is a most lovely, flowing, embracing, and breathing composition in perfection of form, loveliness, vibrant vision, and sweet metaphor … a truly outstanding creation by my all-time favorite protégé. : )
All your romantic readers and fans will relate to your beautifully expressed wishes and hopes, touching in deeply special and appreciated ways … thank you for sharing the bright sincerity of these.

Such a gorgeously thrilling choice of artwork, too, Susan, filling the ambiance of your page with mystical bliss.
Bless You, now and always, Our Dear, Fine Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

Well Richard, If I can write a sonnet, it's because of you! ...What's really amazing is your teaching abilities! Thank you for his lovely review with words dancing on my heart :-) see?? I'm smiling :-)))))))))))

[Richard🖌]

My Dear Susan,

No greater honor can be bestowed upon a teacher than a student's trust and gratefully gratifying accolades, in gracious acknowledgement of his skills to pass along the art sought, embraced … so passionately and deeply revered.
But, to enjoy her own hard earned, elegantly developed, masterful accomplishments is, by far, his greatest reward of all.

With profound, heartfelt sincerity, I thank You, Lady Susan, for sharing yours! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the oxymoron of "restless hush"
I wish I had thought of that...beautiful.
this is so well done, and is a soft, comforting journey for the reader.

Nice to read you again...
j.

[Susan 🦋]

What a sweet review! Thank you so much for taking the time to read. :-)