The Last Goodbye

Step.

Step.

Step.

The last footfalls

he will ever place

bringing him

to her door.

 

She opens the door.

Looks into his face

aged

and shadowed

by heartbroke,

confusion,

misunderstanding.

Hurt

lacing his eyes

she sees.

 

"I don't want to hurt anymore."
Comes to quiet whisper

from his weighed-down lips.

"You were my all."

He recites

a poem

they read together

carelessly

long ago.

"And now I am none."

she whispers back.
Tears fill her eyes.

Her heart swells

with realization

at what she has done.

At what is going to come.

"You don't want me,

that's okay."

He says, looking into her eyes.

"I'll leave."

 

"These voices

whispering secrets

the afterlife holds,

are calling me."

Cold metal

to light-brown hair.

Pull the trigger.

Gone.

Leaving a girl sobbing

in her lost-love's

crimson stains.

Author's Note

Thank you for the inspiration...from several people :) Here's my BOOM! ....kinda :D

Reviews

[Mahigan]

Excellent expression indeed. Very nicely written. Simple words and simple stanzas are often the best; please do not mistake this for insult. I enjoy poems from the heart, soul and mind, and I've found that they are best expressed in our favorite and most common words.

[Angel Bluestocking]

It is a beautiful tragic tale... The beauty of their love comes to a heart wrenching end with the resounding shot from the gun and crimson petals spread across the floor. At the last stanza, it left a haunting image of actually seeing her tear-stained face over his wide-open life-less eyes. All in all, truly a wonderful piece, Allie.

[Kevin Horsley]

This is fabulous the way it is, it flows naturally and tells its tale. It hints at the happiness they once shared but shows the present heart ache they are both enduring to the climactic end.

Good write

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

I love it. It was very emotional and flowed really well.
I love the dialouge. It was as very good read :)
Good job!

[David Winters]

Interesting poem. The last stanza is my favorite. If you know me, you know I like poetry like that last stanza. Good job. I like the dialogue throughout.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

and this is amazing btw

[HopelesslyDevoted]

have you ever heard the song Last Goodbye by Jeff Buckley? I think you would really like it. look it up on youtube if you get the chance

[Lily Mae]

I think you did a great job expressing it all :) xx

[aaron]

hmm,
beautiful,
sad,
meaningful,
and empty.

all of which describe,
the pome,
that i see.

the heart ake,
the emptiness,
it calls out.

so i say,
it is a sad beauty.
like no other.

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Fabulous!