Lighter than a Weather

This piece got published for a good cause at "Circus of Indie Artist Poetry Winter 16" please check it out on Amazon .....

Climbing out of mercy

Running into woods

A small drop of dew

Left there to call

The longest hair

Has finally descended

She looks inside a pot

To make another story

Unfailing to become

The eyes to give 

On sudden calling

Awaken too heavy

Stumbling by the chair

Dropping pennies

Staring up for an answer

The darkness spotted

A blind place 

She wanders 

Crying out of castles

Aided by the healer

To return all blessings

Into the corner of seeders

A white drum of chimes

Flutes telling a tale

A lady stood a chance

Steering her to relief 

Understanding an older uncle

That held her behind his cloak

Allowing no sight

To pierce her eyes again 

Reviews

[Marianne Rose]

There is such attention to the details here- as if captivated by: a small drop of dew, the longest strand of hair descending, the inside of the pot, the corner of seeders, a white drum of chimes- it is as if I am looking at these things sharply in focus as everything else fades back. Then the other thing that strikes me is the feeling that though sound soothes, sights overwhelm. The part about "on sudden calling, awaken too heavy", and stumbling, dropping pennies- this reminds me that the transitions in life are too short, so no time to adjust, no ability to meet expectations. I could get lost in that darkness spotted upon staring up- just stay there. But you go out- wander blindly, to be aided by the healer and the uncle, and their intuitive gifts of music and protection or invisibility. Though there is an inward vision which I will never see through your eyes, the journey outward seems to me to display so much courage, even with the two allies who walk with you. A deep and touching write.

[Nisreen]

Waw Marianne what a review ..... thank you so much for giving me all this care through words

[Shannon]

Very pretty way to describe sadness.

[Nisreen]

Thank you for your review

[Ana B.]

This has a subtle yet protruding sadness about it. A beautiful read, dear author :)

[Nisreen]

Thank you beautiful Ana

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The never ending precision in the direct thought comes through in droves here. That feeling of angst and depravity really lends to the innocence of the writer towards the maturity engrained in the reader or as so thought in the first place, a most intriguing piece, well done, good read.

[Nisreen]

Thank you so much Thomas :)

[Darian B.]

Like many other of the reviewers, I don't fully understand this piece because it has such a depth to it. I know you have it the tag autism and while I have met a few autistic people, I don't know nearly as much about it as I would like to, or should for that matter. I will definitely have to look it up and learn more. Perhaps that will give me greater understanding of this poem but more importantly, I will understand it more so as to be more empathetic. All people should be treated fairly but we cannot do that if we remain in ignorance. And while I don't fully understand this poem, I still enjoyed reading it. It has those deeper meanings I enjoy in your poetry

[Nisreen]

I wrote autism because It has Been published for That cause .... For a young boy ..... I wrote It from my own view way before It was published ... It is what You see in It
Thank You for your review

[PoeticSorcery]

she just can't win can she? that woman has bad luck I tell you :P

[Nisreen]

Thats Life It happens in good and bad luck

[PoeticSorcery]

indeed, sadly.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Captivating poetry.....the title is a bit vague, but maybe you could shed some light on the connection... :)

[Nisreen]

I guess really intelligent people know how to be lighter in weight than the toughest storm so they do not break instead they float ........... thanks for your review

[SleeplessVolcano]

Aahh....floating......yeah.....let me know when you get there......;)

[Nisreen]

already am ................ and it feels good

[SleeplessVolcano]

Write a book about it then.....all us wannabes would surely buy it.....:)

[Nisreen]

you think so
i dont have the confidence to be an author
i would rather mumble behind the curtain lol

[SleeplessVolcano]

Change your mind then......I'll help you change yours, and then you help me to change mine.....:)

[Nisreen]

i couldnt handle the attention that would result of it
pretty shy

[SleeplessVolcano]

Just ignore the attention and continue doing what you are good at.....

[Nisreen]

i see .....

[PhoenixDown]

Never reveal such things. Shame on those who try to persuade.

[Nisreen]

come again .....

[Diamond]

Wow..I am amazed by how your sketch followed your imagination and create this modern art. I must admit that I was unable to connect to your psyche from which this poem came but I understand that there is a deeper meaning than what I am able to relate to. Lovely poem my dear friend.

[Nisreen]

Thank you for your review

[TheAimlessWanderer]

i have Asperger's autism among other things lol but i really like the idea behind spreading the word maybe then i would have got diagnosed a lot sooner instead of when it was far to late age 16 i might have not been so misunderstood. people thought i was intentionally acting out and i may not have been put on meds for most of my life for a slew of different things. all right onto the poem comments i am not the most insightful person when it comes to things such as this so forgive me if i botch my interpretation or just laugh and smile whatever you do is your choice so i can only assume that you were talking about a girl who was lost in the world in others eyes but she was just in her own world finding comfort in things only she sees from the world being continually misunderstood searching for the things that help her find at peace with herself faith and fantasy finding a story in the simplest of things and sadness all the same shielded from the world by someone who is unperturbed by her where she can be free from ridicule probably not even close to what you were saying but i really like the use imagery and metaphors just to complicated for me.

[Nisreen]

I spent a good ten years getting all sorts of things that are unacceptable .... i guess my write is all about embracing the different ..... you may be the most gifted person on earth and no one would know it because the world has got a great deal of narrowness .... i was diagnosed with something that means i am different ..... thank you .... sending you tons of love .........

[TheAimlessWanderer]

i am sorry to hear that i like that message of embracing the different words i like to live by and i would agree with you that the world has a narrow viewpoint however i don't think that is entirely impossible to change thank you for sending me lots of love i appreciate it and thank you for sharing this message with me (:!

[hcarson]

a nice flow o this, i wont pretend to understand every piece about it as iam simply not that good yet haha however i very much enjoyed what i did grasp, well done especially on the publishing!!

[Nisreen]

Thank you so much