No Sympathy

A country boys words to a city gal that did him wrong, yes its personal experience

i just pieced this together, trying to control my anger and emotion crud inside me, it probably could be better but it gets most the point across

Author's Note

These silly games you play
I won't fall another day
Its time someone had to pay
For the pain they caused me (may *country accent)
A scar left for eternitity (eternitay *country accent)

I was california dreamin'
She had me believin'
I thought it was true lovin'
But it wasn't nothin'
But a prank on a poor guys emotion'

I guess I'm the king of fools
When I thought there were rules
But they're just ghouls
And hurtfull cruels
And love is just them girls tools

They're maneaters
Hurt feeders
Pain leaders
FALSE BLAMERS
Slave laborers

They blame it on me
And I just don't see
Its f*king crazy
No sympathy
There will never be

I loved a lie
And I ask why
Was I the only guy
Caught like a fly
In the venus I die

And all I can say
Used to be sorry (sorray *country accent)
But not today
Its time to pay
And I'm not here to stay

If we ever meet
It'll be neat
With a fist I will greet
My throw will be sleek
That'll be sweet

What goes around comes around
That's the pain I'm bringing down
Like a ravid hound
Make you fall to the ground
By my angerous pound

Eye of the tiger
A lover
A liar
A hatefull fire
Fueling my desire

But I can't help but wonder
And I probably shouldn't ponder
Was there ever something their
Did she ever even care
Or was I just caugt in the snare

Reviews

[Becky]

I agree with pretty much all of the reviews, this reads like a song. I even read it to one of the melodies floating about in my head. Great work. Strong message and good wording.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks for the review and well huh I guess since everybodys saying it it could be lol

[Gazza]

Seems like you were hit hard here, good flow of ideas and emotion. Seems like it can be very easily converted to a song.

[Transience]

great pun here-
''In the venus I die''
poem flowed like a song.all the emotions were tangible.nice work.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you, and everybody else, for the reviews ^_^

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Wow Harley. This is deep, I can see how hurt you are/were through this. Excellent work, I'm so sorry you feel like this.

[Owlgirl]

Wow, such emotion in this, great job. It's very well written.

[Mariah Corey]

that is really good. i like how you say "If we ever meet
It'll be neat
With a fist I will greet
My throw will be sleek
That'll be sweet" I luv tht part. good job. :D

[Miranda Richard]

I love this, good job!

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Sorry if you feel that way... Strong emotions where present. I sense a feeling of anxiety, anger, and despair... You got that all out and that's a good thing. And I like how you added up some southern accent... It was fun to read...

[Aehr]

wow.. so many feelings going on here... there's anger, and a spark of sadness, revenge and... its like a roller-coaster ride! I enjoyed this.. the pain, the emotions were all clear... You've done a really good job with this one... Honestly, I know how that feels.. it must be hurting like.. well the pain is from within, its hard to describe it.
Well done Harley!

Gotta shelve this one!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A controlled man is not without a temper nor does he ever lose it, he simply controls how he creatively releases it, leaving the other person intact so they may face themselves. This write was well pinned and raw.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you, and for the name. :)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

The name was in your writing...it just stood out to me of all the things you said.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

They blame it on me
And I just don't see
Its f*king crazy
No sympathy
There will never be

[Harley (arbiter)]

Well thanks for pointing it out. :) it fits well