outburst of the tempest

~ atlast a poem!

 

I am not in pain

But I’m standing in the hard rain

The wetness makes my feet numb

I succumb to be dumb

A foolish playfulness

Hiding the crudeness

-          I roam around in happy commotion

A complete illusion

                

The eye of the storm will come my way, someday

I hope not too soon, but in the distant future

For I am not prepared on the messiness it harbors in its back

The harsh judgments that will pour heavily on my shoulders

Then flowing water will flood my sane world

I need my time to organize

My mental, emotional and physical stability

To stand the outburst of the tempest

Author's Note

credits for pic, found in DA:
Embrace the storm
Eye of the storm

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think we have to embrace the storm of emotions in our lives...it will help keep us sane if we don't fight it...

and a hard rain is refreshing once in awhile...and i like the first line...almost a disclaimer...don't believe what you read after this line...

i am not in pain, really.

i felt this poem so much i had to change out of my wet clothes.

[Pax]

~ smiling ~ can't help but smile at your cleverness my friend... I am happy with this ~ thank you very much...

[Sami Khalil]

"I am not in pain

But I’m standing in the hard rain."
Wonderful title and layout of words and emotions that feels like a hard rain along with the tempest of life that nture brings done with a nice pic of artistic value. We all need that time to prepare and organize for the storm is coming our way and the tempest might flood us any time...
Always a great write from you Mr. Pax...:)

[Pax]

you are great yourself my friend... thank you... i wish i can survive it when the time comes...

[Sami Khalil]

I have all the confidence in you... You are welcome...:)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very expressive poem with core of sadness and self-reflection, which I like so much. The complete illusion can be happy or indifferent feeling, but after we realize it, it could change our mind...to another direction. Is it a feeling like fear from unknown way, or just from something which surely will come, but so unclear and misty in this time? This future storm is waiting all of us, if we allow its name to be "storm", but you can always find balance point in yourself...I`m attached from this lines:
I roam around in happy commotion
A complete illusion

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29.april-013

[Pax]

yes balance ...on which i am aiming.... thank you very much dear friend...

[gabrielle]

Would it help if i offer the voice an umbrella?

Again, this is highly emotional write Kabayan. And i think that somehow, writing has become an effective emotional umbrella. They said that the center of the storm is actually calm but the surroundings are in chaos. i wonder if it's true though. keep on penning!

[Pax]

as expected sa therapist ko...thank you sa payong:) i needed that from time to time...

[Ency Bearis]

A wonderful metaphor, rain - emotional doom. Though you're not in pain but there's that clouds to outburst emotionally, and hold it and try to fight it. Sometimes you need to let it out, that thunder on chest need to to let it out, and breathe high and you will feel the momentum of relief at the end. A thought provoking poem kabayan.
Great write.

[Pax]

thanks kabayan ~ i needed this to understand everything all together ~ someday makaya rin.... I am grateful with your support ~ this means so much!

[Ency Bearis]

Well - hang on, life is good - ika nga. And, that's good thru writing you are releasing what inside of you. Keep faith with God.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I like the concept, Pax - you are not in pain but standing in the hard rain. You are strong enough to face the challenges which will come your way.
"But I’m standing I the hard rain" --- Is it really I or in? (in the hard rain). :)
Nice poem in general, sort of motivation for me. Thanks for sharing this. :)

[Pax]

ops typo ~ thanks kabayan... yup indeed can be a motivation, its for me also... to be able to understand this feeling more ~ sana makaya ko! I am grateful with this kabayan, sa supporta... kaya natin to diba...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes, go go go! Kaya natin to. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Immaculate write, Paxy!
Your artistic expression is electrifying...vibrant and clever!
I felt the twisting of the storm...the forseen, heavy downpour of judgment... WOW!
You have outdone yourself once again! ~xo~:)

[Pax]

oh ~ wow, thank you very much my dear friend... hugs ~ someday I'll be ready to face that storm... I'm grateful with this electrifying review :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I truly felt this read... was something which needed to be written.. well done! :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

(((hugs))) back.. :)

[Pax]

with that I truly appreciate the support ~ sometimes we needed to release something just to understand it better...