Nimbus of Light

A Heart of a Ronin

A mind like Socrates

The soul of Merlyn

 

Lost in life

Bleak road of shadows ahead

Twilight delicate, darkening

Bearings are blank signs

Not sure which road

Will lead to happiness

 

Alone

Wandering

Heartbroken

Dumbfounded

Renewed suspicion

 

Revoke doubt

Face thy fears

Look unflinching at death

Banish the impulse

To stumble indecisively

 

Smoke arises from tears

Burst forth into flame

Renew thy mind

Become the phoenix!

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

AMEN! I was gliding along quite nicely relating on all levels of this.....which is why I had to shout amen. Sometimes...we really need to be our own cheerleaders and pick our pieces up and carry on. The feelings come to life on my screen...and I was held captive from go. Excellent piece...so sorry it took me forever to get here. Definitely a good message. You are not alone. This could well be talking about me!! Excellent write!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Well executed, rebirth as the phoenix. Inspiration for change. Thank you for entering my contest Good Luck.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Definitely, the ending makes this work - it is all of a sudden uplifting and the path is found - wonderful write. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Brette Medb]

I loved the ending. Phoenix's are such amazing creature, and I love how you describe it as being born out of oneself into the soul and path they were always meant to follow. Great work as always : )

Brette

[Forest Green]

Traveling to rise above it all. Nice theme and put into a very compelling flow.

Good work!

Daniel

[Lady Ellen]

Very good I must say. My favorite line is the last one, {become the phoenix.} Something we all go through, at least once in a brief physical lifetime.

Interesting the way you put the words. It almost seems like a poem of despair, and then the light at the tunnel shines through dimly and then bam, become the phoenix!

Very cool. i did enjoy
Ellen

[Fran Marie]

Smoke arises from tears

Burst forth into flame

Renew thy mind

Become the phoenix!

A powerful piece so well penned and expressed ~Fran Marie

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

I got goosebumps reading this and that is rare- I think perhaps you have stumbled upon something wonderful and powerful here- good work!