Dark Light

Dark Light

A Poem by victoria
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randomness, because i was listening to the song dark light by H.I.M, and i was inspired by the title xD

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Dark light
shine bright
Illuminate
my face at night.

So cold
stories told
Lies growing
so old.

Silent tears
nothing here
Give in to
all my fears.

Scarred arms
unwelcome harm
No need to
be alarmed.

Cover up
all the cuts
No one sees
just my luck.

Dark light
shine bright
Help me come
clean tonight.

© 2010 victoria


Author's Note

victoria
like i said, this is just random cuz i like the song Dark Light, by H.I.M. but rates and reviews would be wonderful, and ill give u a cookie xD

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Wow I was about to say this title matches Dark Light, by HIM. Yet I realized you had said that in authors note. Anyways good work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


{'random' is good--this reads well-
...free flowing thoughts...
that's always the best poetry}

...love it...

james:-)


Posted 9 Years Ago


I like the bluntness and the rhyming was so fluent. Wow, I think you ended it really well too. Awesome write :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Life can be hard. The light will come to us sooner or later. The poem told a sad story. Many people hide wounds and scars. We must overcome them. Sometime they are like mountain of burden to defeat. Sometime we need friends and family to support us. A outstanding poem. You said so much in so few words.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


The flow works really well and I agree with Paperhearts it reads like a song. At first it seems light hearted and then it dives into something so much more deeper then the light which caught me by surprise. However, I like the ending since there seems to be hope there and the desire to admit something you are hiding. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Great write! For something that was inspired by a song, this piece almost read like a song too! I liked how short and sharp your lines were, yet how much emotion was behind each and every single word. I thought that you did really well in capturing the essence of the 'dark light'. :)
~PaperHearts

Posted 9 Years Ago


i liked it flowd nicely and rhymed and the last night clean the night i dont know it bothered me didnt catch the meaning i feel itd work to change clean to cleanse or clear even

Posted 9 Years Ago


for such a short poem you were able to show some good emotion, why so tragic? great job

Posted 9 Years Ago


i like it. its filled with emotion, it tells a detailed story in a simple form, and it flows well :) now, give me my cookie.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a short cute poem. I liked it, good job.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on April 7, 2010
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