okay I wrote a song about twenty five years ago and reading this made me remember it its a bit sketchy in my sketchy bunny mind but.....
Woke up this morning,
got out of bed
evenings pleasure
drove in my head
don't know what I'm doing
maybe Ill find a job...
oh i can see now
I'll just pack my things and go
(refrain thing)
Life would be better
these things I'm sure I'll know
the Lowcale solution
okay you can go back to your regularly scheduled program :)
I say this partly of the intention of the write and partly because this reads like a song and like my song it sounds like a very happy tune but it is full of unhappy things in a sort of sardonic looney tunes melody
like my locale solution isn't one in dieting (change your lifestyle not your caloric intake!) and (change how you live not where you live and moving) to cure your ills neither is your write of blight and you scream it as such with a sublime beauty in that wonderful voice of yours. Oh yeah I love that you use mourning like me you are one sexy writer silent:) the the the the thats all the bunny has to say:)
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
A nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who co.. read moreA nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who could resist...
Not our sexy-voiced selves
I am merely happy to be a vessel of which to ship the feelz...
All that follows is a pleasure to see
You are extremely talented
Saying goodbye to a person or a thought
i say so much in this piece
as it becomes so difficult to just let go
Lovely piece
a work of art
I love the way how you bind words so eloquently to form an intricate piece of poetry. This poem very acutely describes the turmoil of the poet's mind. Amazing!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I adore the way you bind words together for an interesting review...! Absolutely thank you, and spot.. read moreI adore the way you bind words together for an interesting review...! Absolutely thank you, and spot-on take...
I guess after a while few investigators will be going to enquire that how your brain handles your imagery power...I guess that's a compliment for you... awesome piece of writing... really loved it S.S. :)
Haha, A.S... That is hilarious... A team of investigators are going to determine my imagery power, e.. read moreHaha, A.S... That is hilarious... A team of investigators are going to determine my imagery power, eh...? A compliment, or the beginning of a scientific horror story... Lol... Thank you, means a lot coming from such a talented writer....
6 Years Ago
that won't be scientific horror story but it will be a example-setting for another young writers... .. read morethat won't be scientific horror story but it will be a example-setting for another young writers... in order to become a dynamic author..and sir, please stop calling me A.S... I don't deserve...I know you are addressing me deliberately...I can be AA but not AS... that's a request
6 Years Ago
Oh, of course, I meant no disrespect... I shall address you as Abhishek, haha...
Every word here in this poem fits perfectly....has an affect on the writer and glows with emotion. I love it !!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I do not know if I like the review, or the profile picture, more... Haha, thanks... I always seem to.. read moreI do not know if I like the review, or the profile picture, more... Haha, thanks... I always seem to read your name as "Pie"... Kind of disappointing it is actually "Pia"... Haha, I will just keep calling you Piece of Pie, in my mind at least... Lol
6 Years Ago
Ahahahahah
I have deep side and i have my meme side (intentional rhyming )
Lol this .. read moreAhahahahah
I have deep side and i have my meme side (intentional rhyming )
Lol this dude here keeps calling me pai.....
Yes feel free to call me what ever you want !! Its a free world (leaving out north korea lol)
6 Years Ago
ROFL... Oh my... Lololol... Dude, it is just your name... It attracts pie, and aye... I tell everyon.. read moreROFL... Oh my... Lololol... Dude, it is just your name... It attracts pie, and aye... I tell everyone that as well, albeit.. I leave North Korea out of it... I do not need any sensory bullshit coming my way... You know how HE gets... Lmao... Ahahahaha...
I am friggin' dying laughing over here...
6 Years Ago
Oh no he may just send more failed missile tests towards "writers cafe"
Lol same im laughing.. read moreOh no he may just send more failed missile tests towards "writers cafe"
Lol same im laughing over the name pia
My best friend once made a spelling typo and called me "poa" and like the banter hasnt stopped
I am no more pia to my friends but a poa lol
6 Years Ago
Hey, at least you are a Piece Of A*s... That is better than being THE a*s... Aha...
6 Years Ago
I have no idea what you just said !! But imma meme that
HeY at LeAsT yOu aRe a PiEcE oF A*S .. read moreI have no idea what you just said !! But imma meme that
HeY at LeAsT yOu aRe a PiEcE oF A*S
Hahahah im a strange person sorry
6 Years Ago
Rofl, meme the heck outta it, strange or not, I like it...! I never know what I am saying....
6 Years Ago
We never know what we were saying.....well same here....
I have severe social anxiety....said.. read moreWe never know what we were saying.....well same here....
I have severe social anxiety....said the weirdest thing to a dude today and scarred him oops my bad
6 Years Ago
Scarred or scared him...? Or... Or both... Haha
6 Years Ago
Both :/
Loool ooopss
6 Years Ago
I say scared ;)
6 Years Ago
Ahahah loool oh god i came home and went like "why am i like this"
Its ok he thought it was f.. read moreAhahah loool oh god i came home and went like "why am i like this"
Its ok he thought it was funny so idk
6 Years Ago
Lmao, i do that all the time, man... I ask myself... Did I just mentally scar that person...? If so... read moreLmao, i do that all the time, man... I ask myself... Did I just mentally scar that person...? If so... do i care... haha
6 Years Ago
Same
Usually idgaf
But in this case i totally lost ma chance with a cutie
6 Years Ago
A cute dude...!?!? I was not aware men came in the flavor of cute... I wanna be cute...
6 Years Ago
Everyone is allowed to be cute.
You be what ever flavor you wanna be
6 Years Ago
...YESH... Yes, then... I am the ultimate flavor of kute... BAR NONE...!
6 Years Ago
Conquer the world with that Kute !!!!
6 Years Ago
Lmao, you are killin' me, srsly... I think I cried a little from laughing...
6 Years Ago
Don't worry, I cried as well XD
6 Years Ago
I actually look like im laughing but deep down i cry as well xD
6 Years Ago
I think my display picture makes the stuff i say even worse.....like id be damn serious about saying.. read moreI think my display picture makes the stuff i say even worse.....like id be damn serious about saying something....and then thered just be my profile picture xD like amazing !!
6 Years Ago
Lol xD Yeah
6 Years Ago
Shaan... I am super confused... Why are you commenting on my conversation... Acting like nothing hap.. read moreShaan... I am super confused... Why are you commenting on my conversation... Acting like nothing happened...? I was beyond courteous to you, and you have ignored me, acting like you did nothing wrong... I apologize for not being able to collab' with you in the style you wanted... Instead of ignoring me, and being passive aggressive, and trying to boss me around with my writing... You could have just said something... I would appreciate that, next time, as opposed to subliminally vying for acceptance by commenting on others conversations... I find that rude, and would kindly ask you to not... Not while behind closed doors... You are quite rude...
6 Years Ago
A good profile picture can destroy all preconceived notions of character... Lmao, Pia... Pie...
6 Years Ago
Well that good very sad very quick .__.
Anyway
Its ok i look like a prepubescent 12 .. read moreWell that good very sad very quick .__.
Anyway
Its ok i look like a prepubescent 12 year old anyway so ya *cries*
6 Years Ago
This has been by far the most entertaining comment section for me looool
6 Years Ago
ME TOO! People say I look 15 on a good day... I am 26... Argh... We will join a sad-sap club... This.. read moreME TOO! People say I look 15 on a good day... I am 26... Argh... We will join a sad-sap club... This has been the best comment section EVER... We found out guys can be kute, North Korea censors amazing jokes, and last, but not least... We have identified you as a piece of a*s....
6 Years Ago
I am a 20 year old gurl who likes calling her self a tea cup cuz i am v fragile and smol like lil pu.. read moreI am a 20 year old gurl who likes calling her self a tea cup cuz i am v fragile and smol like lil pupper
I feel u fam
People think im 14 and im like NUUUU BISH IM 20 COME AT ME
6 Years Ago
......I thought you were a guy this whole time, what the heck, man... Mind=blown... Lmao, I iz tiny .. read more......I thought you were a guy this whole time, what the heck, man... Mind=blown... Lmao, I iz tiny like teeny tot...! Lolol... People be like... Where is your facial hair.... I be like... Bish, i am perfect for allergies, hairless breeds...
6 Years Ago
AHAHAHA I AM A GIRL!!! looooooool dead af
Id probably grow better facial hair than u XD girl .. read moreAHAHAHA I AM A GIRL!!! looooooool dead af
Id probably grow better facial hair than u XD girl stash
6 Years Ago
Pia is a girls name !!!! Im crying
6 Years Ago
I live in america, dude... That means Pia... Is A PIE NAME...! Lmfao... Yes, girls often DO grow mor.. read moreI live in america, dude... That means Pia... Is A PIE NAME...! Lmfao... Yes, girls often DO grow more hair than I do... At least I have hair on my head... That is all that matters...!
6 Years Ago
Well i have hair on my head too ;_;
What even !!! AHAHAA
Yess as long as u dont have .. read moreWell i have hair on my head too ;_;
What even !!! AHAHAA
Yess as long as u dont have bald spots you are good to go !!!
I live in Pakistan
Its not a common name here either....infact its the name of an airline Pakistan International Airlines (note the initials)
I never hear the end of jokes and banter ;_;
6 Years Ago
Oh dear, that would be... You were unintentionally named after an airlines acronym... You win todays.. read moreOh dear, that would be... You were unintentionally named after an airlines acronym... You win todays saddest-sack award... Hahaha... Edging out me, in second place, as the hairless boy wonder...
6 Years Ago
At the airport
I always deal with the
"Wheres your name"
"Its right there...... read moreAt the airport
I always deal with the
"Wheres your name"
"Its right there......"
"Oh are you the owner of this airline" *proceeds to laugh like a clown*
And i just stand there with a poker face
Aahh sed life
Hairless boiz > hairy boys eugg so you are good to go !!
6 Years Ago
Be like, "yep, why you laughing...?" As DEAD serious as you can f*****g be... See if they start to p.. read moreBe like, "yep, why you laughing...?" As DEAD serious as you can f*****g be... See if they start to panic, haha... Sed, sad, shed life... Obviously, have you seen the hair in some of those places...! rhaewfokib5rheluibegliueg... No thank you...
6 Years Ago
I dont wanna get deported ._. So i laugh or fake one....
AHAHAH EW XD
Boys scare me !.. read moreI dont wanna get deported ._. So i laugh or fake one....
AHAHAH EW XD
Boys scare me !!! I stand from far away and admire em
They come too close i fkn run like hell naahh
6 Years Ago
Deportation imminent... Over a joke... Seems legit... Lmao...
Not all boys are bad, though, g.. read moreDeportation imminent... Over a joke... Seems legit... Lmao...
Not all boys are bad, though, girls can be equally "nahhh" inducing
6 Years Ago
Nooo boys r great
What i meant was i have social anxiety af so i end up saying weird s**t and.. read moreNooo boys r great
What i meant was i have social anxiety af so i end up saying weird s**t and scaring em away xD like last night
6 Years Ago
Hmm... Let me offer my advice from the perspective of a boy, then... They do not give a f**k about w.. read moreHmm... Let me offer my advice from the perspective of a boy, then... They do not give a f**k about weird s**t, you are a girl, talking to them... If they are single... That is MORE than enough... Trust me, MORE than enough... Rofl...
6 Years Ago
I think stuff works a lil different in Pakistan :/ idk i guess it does
6 Years Ago
...People are people wherever you go, I would almost assure you, aha... BUT, maybe you are just a fr.. read more...People are people wherever you go, I would almost assure you, aha... BUT, maybe you are just a freak of nature... and un-loveable... Hahaha
6 Years Ago
I am lovable af
Maybe a freak but a fun one xD !!!
Ahahahahahahah
6 Years Ago
I occasionally do bite if someone messes
6 Years Ago
Then... What are you worried about...! That all sounds great! Except... Biting can be painful...
6 Years Ago
But its a good self defence xD
6 Years Ago
A good ranged weapon... THAT is good self defense... Far to many variables at such short distance..... read moreA good ranged weapon... THAT is good self defense... Far to many variables at such short distance...
6 Years Ago
I had to change my display ppl kept thinking i was some weirdo ;_;
(Which i am)
6 Years Ago
But... But... Distorted-Spongebob...
6 Years Ago
Distorted spongebob will be back in no time
Gotta relieve ppl from getting scared of me xD <.. read moreDistorted spongebob will be back in no time
Gotta relieve ppl from getting scared of me xD
I mean they would if they met me
Im 5ft of horror !!!
6 Years Ago
Five whole feet of horror...! You seem to have such an unabashed view of your own debauchery... But .. read moreFive whole feet of horror...! You seem to have such an unabashed view of your own debauchery... But how, I wonder, can you view yourself so clearly... I mean, how do you see over the counter-top...?
6 Years Ago
My only short joke, I swear, hahahaha
6 Years Ago
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL
10/10
Finally someone on this site with .. read moreAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL
10/10
Finally someone on this site with a sense of humour
6 Years Ago
Lmao, plenty of people with sense of humor here... They just would rather be super serious...! After.. read moreLmao, plenty of people with sense of humor here... They just would rather be super serious...! After all, writing is a super serious thing, don't you know... People die on the fields of words...!
6 Years Ago
you should read the stuff i write
Youll be like dafuq a distorted sponge bob can be deep too.. read moreyou should read the stuff i write
Youll be like dafuq a distorted sponge bob can be deep too !!!
I like being both serious and funny !!
6 Years Ago
I have, indeed, read some of your stuff... It was your about me, and some of your writing, in fact.... read moreI have, indeed, read some of your stuff... It was your about me, and some of your writing, in fact... That had me CONVINCED you were a guy... Believe it or not, lol... I am never the best reviewing stories... But I DO read them...
6 Years Ago
Looool what made you believe i was a guy i am so intrigued goddammit XD
6 Years Ago
Not only deep, economic and financial roots show in the analytical way you construct sentences...
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6 Years Ago
Because you... You talk like... I do not even know anymore... Lol, stop judging me...!
6 Years Ago
Thanks ;_;
I mean i am studying those subjects at uni !!
6 Years Ago
Ahahahahah i am not judging !!
I never judge (even if u told me u were a serial killer....i m.. read moreAhahahahah i am not judging !!
I never judge (even if u told me u were a serial killer....i mean id be concerned but i wouldnt judge !!!)
6 Years Ago
But if I lived next door, there would certainly be some judging... Who wants to live next door to a .. read moreBut if I lived next door, there would certainly be some judging... Who wants to live next door to a serial killer... unless the serial killer worked for them... Hmm...
6 Years Ago
Hmmmm interesting
Well if its someone
From the other side of the Earth
Then .. read moreHmmmm interesting
Well if its someone
From the other side of the Earth
Then i doesnt matter at all!!
6 Years Ago
EXACTLY... So... Now that we understand each other...
6 Years Ago
I am a serial killer.
6 Years Ago
Wonderful
I am a crazy cat lady. Nice to meet you silente (what ever that name is)
6 Years Ago
Tis Silent with an e... The "E" is silent... My REAL name is Dylan... But ssshhh, do not tell anyone.. read moreTis Silent with an e... The "E" is silent... My REAL name is Dylan... But ssshhh, do not tell anyone... Especially anyone readings there news-feed... We will have to combine forces and send out serial killer cats to clean things up... "Clean..."
6 Years Ago
I have 7 cats
All ready to fight a b***h who messes
6 Years Ago
Holy... I have two cats... I adore cats... But... SEVEN...? Do you live on a friggin' farm...?
6 Years Ago
LOOOL noo its Pakistan we got alot of stray cats...so i just take care of em
We also have hu.. read moreLOOOL noo its Pakistan we got alot of stray cats...so i just take care of em
We also have huge gardens so they have a nice lil house made
6 Years Ago
Okey... Well I am a bit jealous then... I do not have the space for that... Do you have like, inside.. read moreOkey... Well I am a bit jealous then... I do not have the space for that... Do you have like, inside cats and ones that just come get fed..?
6 Years Ago
I have one house cat
Rufus
And the rest live outside cux they stray but the have a ni.. read moreI have one house cat
Rufus
And the rest live outside cux they stray but the have a nice house made for em !! And yeh they eat and go and then they come back
6 Years Ago
So... I mean, technically... If we got down to brass tacks... I have more kitties than you... Thus.... read moreSo... I mean, technically... If we got down to brass tacks... I have more kitties than you... Thus... Making me a crazier cat lady(man)...
6 Years Ago
S**t.
Dont steal my thunder man
6 Years Ago
Wait, whut... I wanted to reply with "Stolen."... But I need at least ten characters...?!?!?! UGHread moreWait, whut... I wanted to reply with "Stolen."... But I need at least ten characters...?!?!?! UGH
6 Years Ago
You can always add !!!!!!!! To emphasize the thunder stealing
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..........
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...Ahem...
6 Years Ago
!!Stolen!!
6 Years Ago
What a lil bich !!!
6 Years Ago
hahaha....damn...am laughing literally and crying as well!...two crazzy ppl together!
6 Years Ago
Crazy is the new funny !! Aah yes
6 Years Ago
I am not crazy... I just... I have things going on in my head that require my attention... Almost co.. read moreI am not crazy... I just... I have things going on in my head that require my attention... Almost constantly... Almost always... That was the most elongated reaction, Pie... Oh, this is how you would do it... Oh, ok thank you... No problem... WHAT A LIL' BICH...! Lolol
HAHAHAHAHA
This was the most confusing
Amusing and funny conversation ever
6 Years Ago
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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Imma call you doolin
To like protect your identity from the scums of this planet.
Pe.. read moreImma call you doolin
To like protect your identity from the scums of this planet.
Perfect start to a friendship
I admire this poem, beautiful work! You are a true poet with a rare quality almost no one has, you make one feel as if they're with you in the poem, and this is so amazing :)
Thank you so much for sharing, I will be looking forward to reading more of your work sometime :D
Love and warm regards,
Mira.
Also, if you wish please do review my work as well, it would be much appreciated. Give any feedback at all!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Gosh, sorry I missed your review, Mira... I am stunned by your appreciation of my work... You have t.. read moreGosh, sorry I missed your review, Mira... I am stunned by your appreciation of my work... You have the rare quality of unabashed enthusiasm in your review, thank you...! Would love to read and give feedback...
I love the way you describe things and how you relate them to things people know well. You really get inside the readers mind and you make it come to life. What really felt like forever was how much I read this. Like I really stopped and just went through it line for line. I really enjoy your style. xo FLB
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Your praise make me blush, FLP... Such intoxication over words is a wonder to hear... I work very ha.. read moreYour praise make me blush, FLP... Such intoxication over words is a wonder to hear... I work very hard, line by line... So I enjoy knowing people enjoy it... Thank so much...!