You certainly shuffle your thoughts, sir.. and yet, somehow in shuffling, create a cascade of liquid gold. I hesitate to read back and back to when first written, and will sit still to keep my own promise but feel that there will be many different observation about the meaning of this or that. Your meter had me reading louder and louder til I'm tempted to say, the walls rocked but.. Obviously the words are laid at someone else's feet,
' I sit outside and mind my own business...
But in this bees nest I'm best before checks in reality
I'm a liability for the masks of sentimental sentinels brandishing fundamental finality on the mantle of rivalry...
Sodden grease and I follow-she.. '
onwards into space, dark and light, dancing through time to your own heartbeat but wrapped- within someone else's reflection. Need read this again
Posted 2 Months Ago
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2 Months Ago
Thanks very much, Emma Green.
It would certainly not be too much to state the rocking of wall.. read moreThanks very much, Emma Green.
It would certainly not be too much to state the rocking of walls that transpired upon reading.
I am, after all...
Dylan, the Shaker of Walls
Word usage, off the charts; nearly bewildering.
Starkly unique imagery.
A stunning read!
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
A stunning review, Thank you so much, Jimmy... Especially for making me laugh earlier with your work.. read moreA stunning review, Thank you so much, Jimmy... Especially for making me laugh earlier with your work, hah...
Interesting wordplay here. Good vocabulary, but I truly do not know what you are trying to say. Sorry. Lydi*
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
A good sum of my poems are a "tad" abstract, mostly personal metaphors... Thank you for appreciating.. read moreA good sum of my poems are a "tad" abstract, mostly personal metaphors... Thank you for appreciating, Lydia...! No need to apologize, whatever you want them to say... They say, hah
the flow is superb. The imagery and metaphor are to be aspired too by most other "amateur" poets. yet you achieve this level of vivid fluidity with almost alarming consistency and ease. very well done and thought provoking.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, Jeremy, it means a lot coming from such a talented artists as yourself...
I like the way this is laid out kind of looks like an anvil! This is probably your most accessible work yet, but still full of vivid images. Great stuff!
One suggestion if you want it. In the line ' I'm a liability for the masks of sentimental sentinels brandishing fundamental finality on the mantle of rivalry...' I would change the last word to 'banality' because it just clidks better with 'reality'. Try it and see what you think.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Actually... I like that, hah, thanks for the new word... It is def' better in this instance, I would.. read moreActually... I like that, hah, thanks for the new word... It is def' better in this instance, I would have to agree... Thank you for the constructive insight, Iron... I appreciate it
6 Years Ago
You're very welcome, my friend. I'm glad you liked the idea.
This is a spoken word piece that needs to be performed...
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
You always say what I wish, Chris... If only, if only... I should perhaps look more into that around.. read moreYou always say what I wish, Chris... If only, if only... I should perhaps look more into that around my city... Not sure I would be very good at it, though...
6 Years Ago
It takes serious practice with a person's timing and delivery... clarity counts as well. But once y.. read moreIt takes serious practice with a person's timing and delivery... clarity counts as well. But once you do it you'll never want to stop.
6 Years Ago
I actually practice every day, write and spit my own rap, I freestyle as well... Most of my pieces A.. read moreI actually practice every day, write and spit my own rap, I freestyle as well... Most of my pieces ARE freestyles, heh... I will say you are absolutely right... I never want to stop... It is mostly to just help my writing, though, not sure about the rest...
6 Years Ago
THAT is what it takes...
In your area - use the web to find groups, clubs, venues... .. read moreTHAT is what it takes...
In your area - use the web to find groups, clubs, venues... local art and poetry gatherings...check the social sections of the papers...etc.
6 Years Ago
Aye, I am aware... I just do not think I am good enough for that kinda stuff... Perhaps, though, I a.. read moreAye, I am aware... I just do not think I am good enough for that kinda stuff... Perhaps, though, I appreciate the encouragement...
6 Years Ago
Well, check out the local colleges for poetry, slam, drama, theatrical courses... make friends and t.. read moreWell, check out the local colleges for poetry, slam, drama, theatrical courses... make friends and try out!
6 Years Ago
If someone with your experience and skill thinks it wise, then who am I to argue, hah... Thanks agai.. read moreIf someone with your experience and skill thinks it wise, then who am I to argue, hah... Thanks again for taking the time, Chris...
6 Years Ago
You? Why YOU ARE a Poet - of course... chuckling here.