Before Metaphors

Before the metaphors and metal forged I sat ignored and lonesome

 alone and broken...

 Groanin' in an ocean of token defeat

 rote motions

 dead-feet

 my feats retreat...

 Bleeding dreams and fleeced sheep

 eaten lacking wheat

 a sheath for elite-meat-treats and bleep-heaps...

 Driven deeper-steeper

 hear her cry when satellites fly...

 I sit outside and mind my own business...

 But in this bees nest I'm best before checks in reality

 I'm a liability for the masks of sentimental sentinels brandishing fundamental finality on the mantle of rivalry...

Sodden grease and I follow-she

 all ah-me

 and I'm falling-free... 

Solemn freeze

 and I'm free-falling asleep... 

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

You certainly shuffle your thoughts, sir.. and yet, somehow in shuffling, create a cascade of liquid gold. I hesitate to read back and back to when first written, and will sit still to keep my own promise but feel that there will be many different observation about the meaning of this or that. Your meter had me reading louder and louder til I'm tempted to say, the walls rocked but.. Obviously the words are laid at someone else's feet,

' I sit outside and mind my own business...
But in this bees nest I'm best before checks in reality
I'm a liability for the masks of sentimental sentinels brandishing fundamental finality on the mantle of rivalry...
Sodden grease and I follow-she.. '

onwards into space, dark and light, dancing through time to your own heartbeat but wrapped- within someone else's reflection. Need read this again

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks very much, Emma Green.
It would certainly not be too much to state the rocking of walls that transpired upon reading.
I am, after all...
Dylan, the Shaker of Walls

[Sofia]

Woww!! The rhyming is so so so wonderful...even I didn't understand a thing but the way you presented the poem was so awesome.." a sheath for elite-meat-treats and bleep-heaps..." This line sounded like a rap song... you're a way too amazing poet...

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks you, Sofia, we are meant to understand what we need to understand, past that... It is just meat treats for the elite...! Heh

[Zoya]

Gosh...I don't understand a thing. I guess thats, what we call, art! Lol. The way you fidget with words is pretty awesome. Real intricate work...I suppose. I enjoyed it!

[Chase Dylan]

What we call art is absolutely art, hah... The way you review is pretty awesome, I suppose I enjoyed it..! Thanks, Zoe...

[Zoya]

Hehe, but the way you reply to reviews is not pretty awesome, I suppose. Lol. Anyway, you're welcome!

[Chase Dylan]

D'aw, I only attempt to mirror a response formulated from the original review... I am sorry it is not more awesome, haha...

[Zoya]

Kidding ;-p in fact, that's creativity in itself! Lol

[Chase Dylan]

Oh meh gosh... You... you got me, haha... I thought I had offended in some way... I was quite worried... But apparently, your sarcasm is next level dry... Kudos'. Hahaha

[Zoya]

Ohhh Thanks xD!!

[Chase Dylan]

Lol... I... You win this time... I will be back...

[Zoya]

Haha, sure xD

[Wajiha Nayeem]

this is such a pretty poem...all so rhyming and nice to read...i loved it.

[Chase Dylan]

Loved the review, Wajiha... Thanks much...

[Nora]

Oh my god ! It's pretty awesome poem, you are the deepest poet here all your poems are so deep emotionally i love them and the way you choose the deepest meanings 😊

[Chase Dylan]

Well thank you, Nour, that means a lot to hear... I choose carefully...

[Nora]

My pleasure 😊

[Zephyr]

I read it at least three times Silente:)
You are an amazing poet!
I think you should go ahead and publish your book of poems:)
Great work!

[Chase Dylan]

I read the review three times, Neetha. Thanks so much, and I am not very knowledgeable on publishing, maybe someday...

[Zephyr]

Always a pleasure:)

[rowan.taylorrr]

you never fail to amaze me with your writing. you're such a good writer, this piece is so different but so good at the same time. please teach me your ways haha

[Chase Dylan]

Haha, XoXo, thank you, and I will gladly teach anyone my ways...! Even if they are not very impressive ways... Lol