"Understanding"

Laughing... Crying...

Was I ever anything other than a row boat of understanding...

Was the load a toad that couldn't carry the weight of our laughing...

Might as well be cashed-out and standing in the rain

cause you feel no pain when trading me in for gains...

I'm alone and in vain I seek growth with a cane and rope

hope my choke can be caught before it hits the moat...

Rote slop of gropes in the dark

where was I when the mark missed its lark...

I'm hearkened to flop...

So start to stab me every which-way...

I'm heading for memory lane and it's a lame avenue of grain-free

now free but am a seed for the thousands of leeches infecting peaches... 

Molesting creatures...

Electing reavers...

So quiver and see this

hear wit betrayed

leap of faith

marmalade-aid and sated breath today...

Baked blaze and graze...

Now red-in-the-face I take a taste of fae-waste

 that pale-place when aced of graceless lace I hasten traces of pages placed... 

Intent I create craters in a maze of traitors

that bladed saber hater...

I hate her,

and savor another suitor forever suited for her labors   

Later, Gator...

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Understanding usually requires accepted meaning or reference points that are easily communicated. There seems to be more attention here to rhyme than meaning and much of it seems contrived and meaningless without clearly communicating an expression that is not dedicated to the sound of the words. I have never been a fan of rhyme simply for rhyme's sake but believe poetry should express an elevation in communication of common or exceptional values. I had rather the message be clearly communicated without rhyme than with rhyme and without clarity or meaning. These are my thoughts and opinions on the piece but do not reflect the opinions or thoughts of the majority of reviewers here. It is clearly a matter of taste in art. But don't be discouraged. My artistic tastes revolt at that which many renowned critics consider masterpieces.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. Thank you, as well... For the real criticism...You are not alone in thinking "understanding" needs defined lines of expressionism... Without clear-cut meaning... Who knows... However, I like to think I have come across a happy medium since my time of writing this... Between meaning and abstract...

[Sandipta$]

Brilliant..... The way u narrate, that's impressive.... I Enjoyed...

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks Miss Sandy... A brilliant review, and one I enjoyed, appreciate it so much!

[andrew mitchell]

Silente,my Man You are brilliant. I love the narative style in delivery, the imagery that knocks on one thoughts and the wit and cleverness in the story told. Most impressive!

[andrew mitchell]

550 reviews says it all. lol. I never make that grade lol Well done Well accomplished.

[Chase Dylan]

Oh, wow, Andrew... Well you are making me blush, shesh... Thank you so much... Well... It is 500+ plus over a dozen+ poems... Anyone can accumulate, but I appreciate the compliment, it is of the highest regard, and I am glowing...!

[Kesha]

"where was I when the mark missed its lark...
I'm hearkened to flop..."

Love that part.. always love using the words "where was I" in a poem, not sure why either, just do... great piece! And look at you Mister Popular! All these wonderful reviews on your poetry, about time people recognize you! Haha :)

[Chase Dylan]

Hah, we share that like, then... "Where was I?"... I shall never know, for the wind blows all my tracks across the snow... Such a fun phrase to play with! Hah... Mister Popular, eh? I keep hearing that more and more lately... I just wanna write and continue to have people be inspired/want to write themselves because of it.... Thank you, though, for the review and wonderful compliment, heh

[Kesha]

"Where was I when people began recognizing you?" Ha! It really is a fun phrase might use it soon we shall see, currently working on a new piece.. and that's awesome, I just write just because it's become a part of me now :) and you are welcome!

[Chase Dylan]

I think it has always been a part of me, ever since I was a kid I have wanted to write... I can not wait to see your new stuff, and thanks again! Keep being awesome as sauce!

[Kesha]

Yes same..I've been on this site since 2010 (this is a new profile, I didnt like the other one really lol) and I've been writing since before then. You're welcome and you keep being Grool. (great + cool)

[Chase Dylan]

... A stunning explosion of word pairing... Mind=blown... You as well, lol

[mae23]

Love the way the lines trail off allowing the reader to imagine completing the thoughts themselves.

[Chase Dylan]

Well, thank you, Mae... That means a lot coming from such a talented writer as yourself... Aye, a lot do not like the ellipses trains of thought I tend to use in my writing... But glad to know some of us still do... Hah

[mae23]

Haha, yes I really do like that kind of writing!

[Chase Dylan]

Right... Tis' the best

[Salvatore]

Hi Silente,
I tried very hard to understand the meaning of your words but, as you know, I'm not English mother tongue and switched a lot of times the page of your poem with pages of translators. I'm gonna try more. But I just want you to know I read your poem and found it nice (for what I could understand).

[Chase Dylan]

Wow, Salvatore, thanks so much... Coming from someone who doe snot understand a LICK of another language... That is impressive, and I wholeheartedly thank you, again, for the time and appreciation

[mou]

probably it's my first visit to your page..I can not decide how to express my thought with words over your writing..I take a repetitive reading on your write and more it becomes like a crawling picture of someone's thought..I wish I too can write like this!! profound write..

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Mou, and you seemed to decide on a beautiful expression in the end... Anyone can write like this...! Just takes practice

[Priyanshi]

Wow, for this poem. Brilliant selections of words..you have a unique style to write poems and I really love that.
Keep on writing .

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks, Priyanshi... That means the world to hear, you as well...!

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[Tabby Mac]

Your creativity amazes me. I am not sure on the meaning although I have tried. But then I'm simple to a fault sometimes.
You are very talented though and I have fun reading your work even when it's way over my head! Well done!
Tabby

[Chase Dylan]

Oh, wow, thanks so much, Tabby... It means a lot coming from such an expressive and wonderful writer like yourself... Simple is key, in my opinion... I never do anything more but construct sounds together... I appreciate you thinking it is talent, however remember that it is not meant to be over your head...! W/e meaning you give it... That is the true and rightful meaning, I think, and to underestimate yourself... That is the true simplicity...!

[Zugzwang]

This reads like a hiphop song; it carries the same manic energy, drive and beat. Lots of fun to read. Not entirely sure what it means but who cares? Just happy to go along for the ride.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much, Zeit... Exactly, who cares? I am sure some people, but best to give them a wide berth, hah... Hip-hop is my love, and glad you enjoyed the ride, thanks again

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Ha!- Later, Gator- you are chill and sick and dope and killer and....there aren't enough words created yet for your talent! Wait- how about "Pizza-chip-adelic"-yes! you know that is high-praise coming from me...""that bladed saber hater...I hate her, and savor another suitor forever suited for her labors"-wow- requires crucial oral gymnastics to speak this deft play on words...pow! Pow! Beat and flow Popping from beginning to end...and me Applauding on this end of course...:)))

[Chase Dylan]

There are not enough words to describe how awesome your reviews are, Annette... Thanks so darn much, and do not hurt your hands from the force of clapping...!